Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other large vertebrates, has grown into a

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Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other large vertebrates, has grown into a big business. Rare and important fossils are now being sold to private ownership for millions of dollars. This is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public.

The public suffers because fossils that would otherwise be donated to museums where everyone can see them are sold to private collectors who do not allow the public to view their collections. Making it harder for the public to see fossils can lead to a decline in public interest in fossils, which would be a pity.

More importantly, scientists are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils and thereby miss out on potentially crucial discoveries about extinct life forms. Wealthy fossil buyers with a desire to own the rarest and most important fossils can spend virtually limitless amounts of money to acquire them. Scientists and the museums and universities they work for often cannot compete successfully for fossils against millionaire fossil buyers.

Moreover, commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth. Most commercial fossil collectors are untrained or uninterested in carrying out the careful field work and documentation that reveal the most about animal life in the past. For example, scientists have learned about the biology of nest-building dinosaurs called oviraptors by carefully observing the exact position of oviraptor fossils in the ground and the presence of other fossils in the immediate surroundings. Commercial fossil collectors typically pay no attention to how fossils lie in the ground or to the smaller fossils that may surround bigger ones.

The lecturer says that even there is some negative consequences in the commercial fossil, its positive aspects outweigh all the negative one. She added that the negative consequences of commercial fossil are exaggerated.

Firstly, the passage posits that the fossil from commercial discovery is mainly sold privately which can decrease the access of the fossil to the general public; and, ultimately, cause loose interest of the public in the fossil. however, the speaker turns down the reason and says that with the commercial fossil discovery, great exposure for the fossil is possible; the fossil is accessable to even mediocre level of the student.

Secondly, before the selling of the fossil, the fossil should be authorized by the scientist through detail examination. that give the privilege to the scientific field to access the fossil entirely.

Thirdly, the reading says that collector of the commercial fossil is unskilled and uninterested which results loss of the valuable evidence of the fossil. however, the professor counters the point by saying that it will better to have more fossil even if some fossil evidence is lost during the process. He added that without the commercial fossil process, there is no chance that we get extra information of the fossil as fossil finding institutions like scientific and academic institutions barely run fossil finding program.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ecrease the access of the fossil to the general public; and, ultimately, cause loose interest ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...e interest of the public in the fossil. however, the speaker turns down the reason and ...
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Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...e scientist through detail examination. that give the privilege to the scientific fi...
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Line 11, column 156, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...of the valuable evidence of the fossil. however, the professor counters the point by sa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1177.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 218.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39908256881 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72620664597 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 145.348785872 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54128440367 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0555264689 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.777777778 110.228320801 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2222222222 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0248298285806 0.272083759551 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.014473605689 0.0996497079465 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0149676856211 0.0662205650399 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0166738950849 0.162205337803 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00995337013358 0.0443174109184 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 53.8541721854 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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