TOEFL integrated writing: work a four-day week.

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TOEFL integrated writing: work a four-day week.

The reading and the lecture both are about a policy option of working four days weekend instead of five working days. The author of the reading believes that it will benefit the economy, company and employee. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article. He thinks that it is risky and will in fact reduce the benefits.
First of all, the author claims that having the short weekend will increase the company profit as employee feel more rested and alert so there will be less costly error. It is pointed out that the company profit will increase as only 80 percent of normal rate will be paid for four-day employee. This argument is challenged by the lecturer. He says that as the company has to hire new employee and there will be additional costs like training, office space, computer and medicines which will increase the costs of the company.
Secondly, the author states that working short weekend will reduce unemployment rate. He argues that as the workload has to be shifted to others new workers could be hired at the same rate. This argument is rebutted in the lecture. The lecturer observes that hiring new workers will be costly. He explains it further that rather it will be beneficial if they choose to work overtime instead. Rather, no additional job will be created as company force employee to do the work of five days within four days. This can result in more pressure to employees.
Finally, the author mentions that this policy will be beneficial for the individual employees. It is noted that this will increase the quality of lives by spending time with families and perusing private interest. The lecturer casts doubt on this by arguing that it will be risky as it decreases the job stability. He puts forth the idea that those employees will be the one to lose their job first during the economic downturn. It equally reduces the chances of promotion as employee has to work 5 days to be promoted in management position.

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Average: 6.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...efit the economy, company and employee. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, as to, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 5.04856512141 357% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 342.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74561403509 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35864163945 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479532163743 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 497.7 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 3.25607064018 338% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.378168762 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.15 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 7.06452816374 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0968393227464 0.272083759551 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369776823694 0.0996497079465 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066069833732 0.0662205650399 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787261893492 0.162205337803 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412207034941 0.0443174109184 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.3589403974 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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