TOEFL T P O 40 - Integrated Writing Task

Both the reading and the listening are discussing the possibility of permanent human presence on the venus. While the text provides some reasons to support the idea that maintaining the human presence on Venus is impossible, the professor casts doubt on them and believes it is certainly possible.
First of all, the writer makes the point that the pressure at the venus' surface is greater than the earth' surface that it crush anything that people might land on Venus' surface. The professor, however, demonstrates another idea that people can build a station at about 50 km higher than venus surface. In that latitude, the pressure is equal to earth surface pressure. Therefore, people's devices would not be crushed.
Secondly, the professor rejects the claim which made in the reading passage that there is a lack of both water and oxygen on venue's surface, the lecturer asserts that the carbon dioxide and so2 are the essential constituents of the venus's atmosphere so astronauts can produce oxygen from this element. therefore, the human doesn't have to carry water and oxygen from earth.
Lastly, the author states that there are thick clouds of carbon on the venus' atmosphere that cause reflects 60 percent of sunlight reflect space. The speaker calls this idea into a question by saying that these clouds are not thick enough to reflect 60percent of sunlight and the sunlight radiation can move through them. Moreover, these clouds are lower than the human station, so the people who live in the station can benefit from both the direct and reflected sunlight.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
in the lecture, the professor points out t...
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Line 1, column 118, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'explaining'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: explaining
...the reading passage are not challenging to explain human presence on venus permanently, he...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Firstly
... refuses them one by one respectively. firstly, the author says that both human and sp...
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Line 2, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Nevertheless
...ue to the extreme atmospheric pressure. nevertheless, he disputes the points and he believes...
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Line 2, column 194, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...isputes the points and he believes that the, although surface presure might be high ...
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Line 2, column 320, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
... up to the surface, is equal to normal. thus, there isnt any danger to human. secon...
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Line 2, column 332, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...urface, is equal to normal. thus, there isnt any danger to human. secondly, the pro...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
... thus, there isnt any danger to human. secondly, the professor rejects the claim which ...
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Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...s can produce oxygen from this element. therefore, the human doesnt have to carry water a...
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Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...from this element. therefore, the human doesnt have to carry water and oxygen from ear...
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Line 4, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...rough from clouds due to the thickness. therefore, the human will miss the opportunity to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1232.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 244.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04918032787 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61916991842 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549180327869 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.4219243741 49.2860985944 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.0 110.228320801 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 21.698381199 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 7.06452816374 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.3589403974 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 53.8541721854 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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