TOEFL TPO 42 - Integrated Writing Task

Essay topics: TOEFL TPO 42 - Integrated Writing Task

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the article states that wild birds cannot recognize the glass windows used in the buildings and srtick to it. this cause serious injury to them. the atricle provides three reasons for solving this problem. However, the professor explains that all of the solutions presented in the reading cannot stop this event, and are not effective and refutes each of the author's rasons.

first, the reading claims that replace clear glass with one direction's tranparent glass. the professor opposes this point by saying that transaprent glass in one direction resemble a mirror and birds again cannot understand mirror. he also states that, mirror glass reflects the light as sky or trees reflect. so bird cannot distinguish differences between them.

second, the article posits that painting or designing new such as using stripes on the glass ( in this stance, people can see out, but other people or birds which are out can not see inside of the buildings). in contrasts, the peofessor says stripes which used for this purpose is narrow, must use very thickh stripes. according to the professor, when using thick stripes on the glass, not only there were small spots for people who want to see out of the glass, but the inside of the room went into darkness.

third, the reading says artificial magnetic field can guides birds go awayr from near the buildings. the professor cast doubt on this point by explaining that bird's navigation by magnetic field is for long distances not for short trips. for example, when birds want to go from cold climate to warn one use magnetic field to find proper way, while in short distances birds use their eyes.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
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the article states that wild birds cannot r...
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... it. this cause serious injury to them. the atricle provides three reasons for solv...
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Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...m. However, the professor explains that all of the solutions presented in the reading cann...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...tes each of the authors rasons. first, the reading claims that replace clear ...
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Line 7, column 57, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one direction', 'a direction', or simply 'directions'?
Suggestion: one direction; a direction; directions
...ng claims that replace clear glass with one directions tranparent glass. the professor opposes...
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...s with one directions tranparent glass. the professor opposes this point by saying ...
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...d birds again cannot understand mirror. he also states that, mirror glass reflects...
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...ects the light as sky or trees reflect. so bird cannot distinguish differences bet...
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...guish differences between them. second, the article posits that painting or de...
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Line 13, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...g new such as using stripes on the glass in this stance, people can see out, but ...
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...ut can not see inside of the buildings. in contrasts, the peofessor says stripes w...
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...s narrow, must use very thickh stripes. according to the professor, when using thick stri...
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Suggestion: Third
...of the room went into darkness. third, the reading says artificial magnetic f...
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Line 19, column 55, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'guide'
Suggestion: guide
...ding says artificial magnetic field can guides birds go awayr from near the buildings....
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Suggestion: The
...birds go awayr from near the buildings. the professor cast doubt on this point by e...
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...for long distances not for short trips. for example, when birds want to go from col...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, third, while, for example, in contrast, in short, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1386.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 277.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0036101083 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2926376427 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563176895307 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0620023734 49.2860985944 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 4.19205298013 382% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45545367823 0.272083759551 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150222041162 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901360641488 0.0662205650399 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254977133946 0.162205337803 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436350367061 0.0443174109184 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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