TPO-09 - Integrated Writing Task Car manufacturers and governments have been eagerly seeking a replacement for the automobile's main source of power, the internal-combustion engine. By far the most promising alternative source of energy for cars is the hy

The article states the efficient way of using one of the naturally available substance, hydrogen for running the automobiles instead of using internal combustion engine. It also states three main advantages of using the hydrogen based and fuel cell engine. However, the professor refutes the facts stated in article and also gives three reasons to prove how the article is wrong in its stand.

First, the article states that petroleum is one of the resource which is non-renewable and as a solution, a renewable resource, that is usage of hydrogen fuel-celled should be adopted. The professor however confutes the solution stated. Even though the professor agrees upon that petroleum is finite, she argues that process of obtaining the hydrogen in the consumable form is very tedious. Although hydrogen is readily available in the nature, it is not in the usable state. To obtain the pure form of hydrogen, in the liquid state, purification process has to take place and this hydrogen liquid should be kept under very cold temperature at minus 253 degree Celsius. For this it would require sophisticated lab requirements and its also not practical.

Second, the article states that the usage of hydrogen based fuels would reduce the pollution. While the professor deny this saying that the usage of hydrogen based fuels indirectly lead to the pollution. This is because the process involved in the manufacture of the liquid hydrogen would require more energy like oil, coal and other resources which would result in the pollution. She argue using hydrogen based fuels would not solve the problem of pollution control.

Third, the article averts that usage of fuel-cell engine would improve the economy. Whereas, the professor opposes this statement too. She says that manufacturing fuel cell is done by decomposing the platinum and hints that platinum is very very expensive. She also says that without platinum, the hydrogen would not decompose and she also indicated till today this process has never succeeded.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...based fuels would reduce the pollution. While the professor deny this saying that the...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...hich would result in the pollution. She argue using hydrogen based fuels would not so...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...-cell engine would improve the economy. Whereas, the professor opposes this statement t...
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Line 7, column 237, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: very
...the platinum and hints that platinum is very very expensive. She also says that without p...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, third, whereas, while, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 325.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23692307692 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60859571372 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486153846154 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 541.8 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2090817206 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.117647059 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1176470588 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 7.06452816374 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290062821367 0.272083759551 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107842749445 0.0996497079465 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088046296192 0.0662205650399 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185616262857 0.162205337803 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263744692263 0.0443174109184 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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