TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

The reading passage and lecture hold contradictory opinions on two possible explanations of the decline of the sea otter.

To begin with, the passage supports the pollution hypothesis by saying that there were sources of pollution along the coast and the polluted water was harm to otters' life. However, the speaker says the pollution hypothesis is weaken by the fact that there was no dead otter washed up on shore. On the other hand, no dead otter on the shore reflected the predation hypothesis. The predator ate the otter immediately so there was no dead otter on the shore.

In the second place, the passage states that otters are not the only species that declined. Whatever affected otters also endangered other sea mammals. And predators like orca only hunt large prey like whales. The speaker refutes this opinion by arguing that the whale disappeared at the time. Orcas have to change eating habit. They targeted at smaller prey like otters and seals.

Lastly, the passage advocates the pollution hypothesis by suggesting that uneven pattern of otter decline was caused by the uneven concentrations of pollutants. The speaker disagrees with this view. She says that less decline of otters was because orcas cannot access where they located, like shallow or rocky places.

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Average: 7.2 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'weakened'.
Suggestion: weakened
...peaker says the pollution hypothesis is weaken by the fact that there was no dead otte...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, lastly, second, so, to begin with, in the second place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1081.0 1373.03311258 79% => OK
No of words: 211.0 270.72406181 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12322274882 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4853290241 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 145.348785872 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559241706161 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 342.0 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2802764585 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.2142857143 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0714285714 21.698381199 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373405109826 0.272083759551 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12892761356 0.0996497079465 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796196138618 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214429397217 0.162205337803 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409357879546 0.0443174109184 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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the polluted water was harm to otters' life
the polluted water was harmful to otters' life

is weaken by the fact that
is weakened by the fact that

there was no dead otter washed up on shore
there was no dead otters washed up on shore

On the other hand, no dead otter on the shore
On the other hand, no dead otters on the shore

the whale disappeared at the time
the whales are disappeared at the time

at smaller prey like otters and seals.
at smaller preys like otters and seals.

where they located
where they are located

Sentence: On the other hand, no dead otter on the shore reflected the predation hypothesis.
Error: predation Suggestion: No alternate word

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2 //you have issues on singular/plural. we say:

a car or cars
an apple or apples

if we go to a store and want to buy apples, it is wrong to say:
'I want to buy apple'

or it is wrong to ask people:
where are apple?

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 211 250
No. of Characters: 1047 1200
No. of Different Words: 120 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.811 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.962 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.434 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 54 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 30 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.681 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4