TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

The reading and the lecture are both about declining sea otter in the western coast on the United States of America, which has important role in the ecosystem. While the passage suggests that the cause may be environmental pollution and provides three reasons of supports, the article casts doubt on all claims made in the passage by saying that investigation approved that predation is most likely the main cause.

First of all, the article mentions that water samples had showed out high levels of chemicals like oil, which might decrease the sea otter's resistance to any infection. However, the lecturer explains that environmental pollution theory weakened when dead sea otter was found near coastal beach. Furthermore, she puts forth the idea that if the reason was predation, they might not be able to find any dead body, because it would not wash out to the shore.

Second, the author states that there are also other mammals such as sea lions and seal were declined due to environmental pollution, which affects the entirely ecosystem and not specific species. The professor, on the other side, says that other mammals declined as a result of increased human hunting to whales, which represent essential meal to Orca. Consequently, orca started to look for alternative, which are other mammals like sea lions and seals.

Third, the writer claims that the fluctuation pattern of otter decline could be explained by environmental factors that could create different concentration of pollutants. Conversely, the lecturer illustrates this theory by explaining that the pattern is related to predation theory more than environmental pollution. She elaborates on this by mentioning this pattern depends on the locations, which orcas could access. It was found sea otters declined in places where orcas live, Although, sea otters did not decline in shallow water, where orcas have no access to it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'otters'' or 'otter's'?
Suggestion: otters'; otter's
... like oil, which might decrease the sea otters resistance to any infection. However, t...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: there are other; there are also
...hore. Second, the author states that there are also other mammals such as sea lions and seal were...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, conversely, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, so, third, while, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 306.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24183006536 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6984837755 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581699346405 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4630628985 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.666666667 110.228320801 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06452816374 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425505796524 0.272083759551 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15057342998 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701639840659 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234095398905 0.162205337803 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437757542094 0.0443174109184 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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