TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The reading passage and the lecture are both about question of destiny of different fossils which are existing on the market. The author of the snippet believes that both public and scientists will suffer because of the selling fossils to the private collections. On the other hand, the lecturer considers that the statements made in the reading are slightly exaggerated, and she reinforces her opinion by providing several examples.

First of all, there is identified in the reading fragment that public doesn’t have any chances to observe fossils, for example in the museums. However, the speaker asserts that open access to selling or buying fossils bring even greater exposure of fossils. In the other words, schools and universities will be able to purchase some fossils to their classes, and students will have access to them.

The subsequent lecturer’s argument is raleted to the statement made in the excerpt, that if fossils are going to be in the private collections, scientists will miss out some important discoveries without access to them. She disputes this by claimimg that all fossils are identified and investigated by scientists before they pass to the museums or to the private collections. Thus, scientists wouldn’t miss any significant investigations.

To sum up, the professor believes that selling and buying fossils will benefit not only for public organisations, but also for scientists.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e in the private collections, scientists will miss out some important discoveries...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, thus, for example, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1213.0 1373.03311258 88% => OK
No of words: 224.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41517857143 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96836732227 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544642857143 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1554714294 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.3 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 7.06452816374 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381767094152 0.272083759551 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15282189327 0.0996497079465 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770043211749 0.0662205650399 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23282485088 0.162205337803 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202748936388 0.0443174109184 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.2367328918 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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