TPO-14 - Integrated Writing Task Every year, forest fires and severe stormscause a great deal of damage to forests in the northwestern United States. One way of dealing with the aftermath of these disasters is called salvage logging, which is the practice

Nowadays, almost all of people travel to other areas. Traveling has considerable impact on people. Some people believe that they benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries; others disagree. I strongly believe that people benefit more from traveling to foreign countries for two most important reasons that is elaborated in the following paragraphs.
The first reason is that they benefit in bussuniss. If people travel to foreign countries, they can understand a lot of things about trading. They learn a lot of new techniques that the other people use them. For example, last year my brother Mahdi, who study management in university, traveled to the United Stated. When he return to our own country, he said that he gain a lot new experience about import medicine equipment to our country. He started his company and after five years he is really successful. In fact, his company was developed from ten employments to one hundred employments. If he did not go to abroad, he could not set a successful company.
The second reason is that people can check up a lot of opportunities for working. Having more opportunities for working allows people to select the best one and it is more probable that they find a well-paid job. For example, two years ago I went to London, and I get to know with Maria, who has a business in London. We talked about our majors and our experiences. And she invited me to see his company. When I went there, I realize that I can work in his company because their works relate to my major study, Artificial Intelligence that is defines as any system that can learn automatically. Therefore, I have worked there for two years. It was very useful for me, because I gained some ecperiences. As you can see, if I did not travel there, I would not get to know with Maria and find a good job.
To sum up, I believe that people benefit more from traveling to foreign countries than from traveling in their own country. Not only do they could benefit in bussines, but they also could check up more opportunities for finding a job. Traveling can open our minds.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in fact, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 22.412803532 263% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1373.03311258 128% => OK
No of words: 373.0 270.72406181 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71849865952 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68586148058 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 145.348785872 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490616621984 0.540411800872 91% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 419.366225166 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 3.25607064018 399% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 4.0 0.116997792494 3419% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 1.25165562914 559% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 13.0662251656 184% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4124353455 49.2860985944 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.3333333333 110.228320801 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5416666667 21.698381199 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 7.06452816374 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126311836139 0.272083759551 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419502961263 0.0996497079465 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029821321669 0.0662205650399 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0856202759468 0.162205337803 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284675954062 0.0443174109184 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.3589403974 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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