TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for b

In the reading author says that because of mankind crowed rising in the united state during the late century some factors such as pesticide using increasing because of agriculture development affect animals life, especially birds. According to the reading these declining is continuing. In the lecture professor argues that not only birds population hasn't been decreasing but also their crowed has been rising because of these factors. Professor disagrees and says this factor cause population of some other bird type increase. According to the professor by civilization some birds habitation increase and as a result their and total population of birds increase.
Author also says that by population increase need to agriculture also increase and so many natural lands especially birds habitats should be destroyed to dominate land for agriculture. In this issue professor disagrees again and expresses that in the U.S less and less land is using for agriculture every years because instead of land increasing the introduction of more productive which product more crop is used to increase agriculture yield. According of the professor by using this strategy more production will be yield in each km2 without wasting more birds habitats.
Finally, reading also says that pesticides using for agriculture production protection also has a negative effect on birds population. According to the reading pesticides toxic component can inter to water and small animals during food chain which birds use these two for feeding and harm because of their pesticides ingredients. Lecture says nowadays less toxic pesticide are being developing and changed genetic plants without pesticides attractive ability is producing. According to the professor these two change cause pesticides be less at dangerous for birds.

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Average: 4 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...r argues that not only birds population hasnt been decreasing but also their crowed h...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 12.0772626932 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 22.412803532 22% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 30.3222958057 26% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 371.0 1373.03311258 27% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 67.0 270.72406181 25% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53731343284 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 2.86100555258 4.04702891845 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55315511176 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 51.0 145.348785872 35% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.761194029851 0.540411800872 141% => OK
syllable_count: 117.9 419.366225166 28% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 13.0662251656 23% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.4904811069 49.2860985944 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.666666667 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160981363553 0.272083759551 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872523579945 0.0996497079465 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397784276224 0.0662205650399 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160981363553 0.162205337803 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 53.8541721854 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.2367328918 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.42419426049 118% => OK
difficult_words: 22.0 63.6247240618 35% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.7273730684 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 40.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 12.0 Out of 30
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