TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

Buzzing is the method of advertising that companies hire people to personally promote products to people they know or meet. Buzzers don't reveal that are being paid. The reading passage thinks that using this method of advertising is harmful for consumers and suit for companies. But the lecturer, who works as a buzzer, thinks that buzzing is a great idea.

The reading passage thinks that consumers should know whether a person is being paid to praise a product. This makes difference for consumers. The reading passage thinks that buzzing may mislead consumers. According to the lecturer, people always ask him a lot about products and he says truth about quality of products.

The reading passage thinks that people listen to buzzers less critically than they have to. Because, they trust to buzzers. But the lecturer claims that people asks him a lot of questions about good service and product and there is no trustworthy.

Finally, the reading passage thinks that using buzzing has harmful effect on social relationship. Because it spreads mistrust and dishonestly in society. But the lecturer thinks that it is an stupid idea. The lecturer thinks that by reccuping buzzer, people feel more trustful and has positive effect on social relationship.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ts to people they know or meet. Buzzers dont reveal that are being paid. The reading...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thinks that buzzing is a great idea. The reading passage thinks that consumer...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ays truth about quality of products. The reading passage thinks that people l...
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Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...zers less critically than they have to. Because, they trust to buzzers. But the lecture...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...product and there is no trustworthy. Finally, the reading passage thinks that...
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Line 7, column 192, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ety. But the lecturer thinks that it is an stupid idea. The lecturer thinks that b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, honestly, if, may, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1059.0 1373.03311258 77% => OK
No of words: 204.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19117647059 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56047107203 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 145.348785872 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519607843137 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 419.366225166 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 21.2450331126 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8710612343 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.6 110.228320801 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6 21.698381199 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 7.06452816374 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372800312913 0.272083759551 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133096637463 0.0996497079465 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934336370298 0.0662205650399 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245952141165 0.162205337803 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100815572094 0.0443174109184 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 53.8541721854 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.23 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 63.6247240618 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.498013245 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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