TOEFL T P O 19 Integrated Writing Task

The reading is regarding to buzzers who introduce products to their own surrounding people and the reading points out disadvantages of being buzzers. On the other hand, the professor argues with that by mentioning that his self was a part time buzzer and base on his own experiences refutes each author's reasons.

Initially, the reading says that consumers should be aware of whether a person are being paid to persuade people to purchase products, because knowing that makes a lot differences. On the contrary, the professor states that companies hire those persons as buzzers that are satisfied by products. He says that satisfied consumers who now are buzzers says truth and their belief of products.

Second, the reading claims that consumers believe what the buzzers say, who pretend are just private individuals and the buzzers may mislead consumers. Hence, this could cause a catastrophic for consumers. In contrast, the professor says that the buzzers could not sell products to consumers, unless answer all consumer's questions regarding to products.

Last but not least, the reading says that this way of advertising affects social relationship. Soon or late, consumers might find out the truth about their secret buzzer friends, as a result, consumers will become less trustful of people in general. However, the professor argues with this point by saying that buzzers sell high level products, therefor consumers, based on their own good experience of buying, even will become more trustful and open to people.

Votes
Average: 8.5 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... that by mentioning that his self was a part time buzzer and base on his own experiences ...
^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'so', 'in contrast', 'in general', 'as a result', 'on the contrary', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.273062730627 0.261695866417 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.158671586716 0.158904122519 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0738007380074 0.0723426182421 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0369003690037 0.0435111971325 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0258302583026 0.0277247811725 93% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121771217712 0.128828473217 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0369003690037 0.0370669169778 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.64784036761 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0258302583026 0.0208969081088 124% => OK
Particles: 0.00738007380074 0.00154638098197 477% => OK
Determiners: 0.10332103321 0.128158765124 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0258302583026 0.0158828679856 163% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0184501845018 0.0114777025283 161% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1530.0 1645.83664459 93% => OK
No of words: 243.0 271.125827815 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.2962962963 6.08160592843 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.04852973271 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.411522633745 0.374372842146 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.320987654321 0.287516216867 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.20987654321 0.187439937562 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.16049382716 0.113142543107 142% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64784036761 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559670781893 0.539623497131 104% => OK
Word variations: 54.6877807486 53.8517498576 102% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0529801325 84% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0909090909 21.7502111507 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0097048437 49.3711431718 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.090909091 132.220823453 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0909090909 21.7502111507 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.18181818182 0.878197800319 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 54.189674523 50.5018328374 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.95 1.90840788429 102% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508510076474 0.549887131256 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.124254859093 0.142949733639 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0637600752886 0.0787303798458 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.617058919369 0.631733273073 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.124113721818 0.139662658121 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.237201239672 0.266732575781 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795270325778 0.103435571967 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.368828090639 0.414875509568 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0419439865894 0.0530846634433 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.358746998227 0.40443939384 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303900664228 0.0528353158467 58% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.26048565121 70% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.49668874172 143% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.1766004415 94% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.2958057395 97% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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and base on his own experiences
and based on his own experiences

a person are being paid
a person is being paid

as buzzers that are satisfied by products.
as buzzers who are satisfied by products.

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 12
No. of Words: 243 250
No. of Characters: 1250 1200
No. of Different Words: 134 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.948 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.144 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.543 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.115 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.639 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4