TPO 21 - Integrated TOEFL essay

The article introduces the topic of genetic modification to enhance trees. More specifically, the writer declares that this approach will lead to growing more vegetation in a short time. The lecturer in the listening passage disagrees. She believes that although there are some benefits in this modification, it is costly and has serious problems.
 
In the reading, the author begins by stating that genetic modification makes the trees stronger for surviving than unchanged once. The lecturer, however, disagrees. She argues that the plants which genetically modified are much uniform, and as a result, if there is an incompatible environmental condition, all the trees will be destroyed entirely.
 
The author also claims that genetically modified trees provide some beneficial infrastructures for economic growth. Again, the lecturer believes there are flaws in the writer's argument. The speaker holds that there will be some hidden cost in this method. In fact, there is a policy in which for each newly planted tree, the farmers are obliged to pay to the government.
 
Another reason why the author asserts that genetic modification promise to bring a vast number of benefits is that it will inhibit the over-exploit of wild trees to respond to high demands for firewood and construction timber. The professor in the listening passage is doubtful that this is accurate. He states that planting the genetically modified trees though the natural once, it gives rise to become out of competition for requirement resources. Moreover, it will bring more destruction to the natural environment.
 
To sum up, both the writer and professor hold conflicting views about genetic modification. It is clear that they will have trouble finding common ground on this issue.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...it is costly and has serious problems.   In the reading, the author begins by sta...
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... the trees will be destroyed entirely.   The author also claims that genetically ...
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...ecturer believes there are flaws in the writers argument. The speaker holds that there ...
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... are obliged to pay to the government.   Another reason why the author asserts th...
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...estruction to the natural environment.   To sum up, both the writer and professor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, in fact, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 5.01324503311 299% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 282.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32978723404 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91241849325 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556737588652 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.5710694645 49.2860985944 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4117647059 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5882352941 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 7.06452816374 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369584087811 0.272083759551 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100201506543 0.0996497079465 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892591866933 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198419159016 0.162205337803 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855575823101 0.0443174109184 193% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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