TPO-21 - Integrated Writing Task Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees through genetic modification. It is possible to create trees that produce more fruit, g

The lecturer challenges the topic proposed in the reading that planting genetically modified trees on a large scale promises to bring a number of benefits. And she thinks that there are series of problems and costs for planting genetically modified trees.
First, the article indicates that genetically modified trees are designed to be hardier than nature trees, so they are more likely to survive than unmodified couterparts. However, the professor points out that though being resistant to a kind of disease cannot prove their survival. Because unmodified trees are genetically diverse, though most of them would died due to some viruses, some individuals would survive. By contrast, genetically modified trees are genetically uniform, once they are not resistant to an unique virus, they would all died. Thus they are likely to be wiped out due to some environmental changes.
Second, the passage supposes that genetically modified trees promises to bring a number of economic benefits to those who grow them. But the lecturer supports that there are some hiden costs. Farmers cannot plant them for free, so they have to pay for the seeds to the company. Thus farmers should cost much money to the company for every plant.
Third, the essay mentions that the use of genetically modified trees can prevent overexploitation of wild trees. Nevertheless, the lecturer presumes that genetically modified trees are growing more aggresively than unmodified trees,which represents that they would compete some resources with their unmodified couterparts such as water and soil. Hence, using genetically modified trees cannot save the endangered native trees.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 359, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'die'
Suggestion: die
...ally diverse, though most of them would died due to some viruses, some individuals w...
^^^^
Line 2, column 513, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...uniform, once they are not resistant to an unique virus, they would all died. Thus...
^^
Line 2, column 551, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...o an unique virus, they would all died. Thus they are likely to be wiped out due to ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ve to pay for the seeds to the company. Thus farmers should cost much money to the c...
^^^^
Line 4, column 231, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...g more aggresively than unmodified trees,which represents that they would compete some...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, third, thus, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 258.0 270.72406181 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43410852713 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75489523386 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542635658915 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.5835183247 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.142857143 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.58016305221 0.272083759551 213% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216029307143 0.0996497079465 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136261338482 0.0662205650399 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.370174231428 0.162205337803 228% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707042254411 0.0443174109184 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.8541721854 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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