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TPO 24 intedrated writting

Animal fossils provide less information about actual animal tissues because it has been replaced by minerals. Both the lecturer and article discuss the possibility of actual tissue remains in the fossils of Tyrannosaurus rex (T. rex), a dinosaur. The former was not convinced about the presence of actual animal tissue while lateral emphasizes the fossils have actual remains of blood vessels, red blood cells, and college.

The first point of the discussion revolves around the presence of blood vessels. The instructor cast doubt about this theory. He explains that soft tissue that they found is not blood vessels. He says that once the organism lives in the bone they colonize their and make hollow space. So the soft material they found is not the blood vessels it might be the soft substance which forms after the colonizing by the organism. However, the article claims that the fossil of legs mentions the branches of small tissue presence.

Moreover, another topic of debate is the presence of spheres that could be the red blood cells. Once again the professor was not convinced about the theory. He mentions that fossils of other animals which they found near this fossil they don't have spheres than how come this fossil was left with spears. He says that red material they found it might be red minerals. On the other hand, the article states that various parts of inner bone show the presence of spheres which could be the red blood cells.

Last but not list, we reach the final argument about it contains collagen. The professor says that we can not find the collage on the fossils which was 1000 years old then how can we see the collage on the fossils which is 70 million years ago. He says that this theory contradicts the idea. He also explains that collagen may come from the skin of humans because humans contain it. Nevertheless, the passage highlight that dinosaur leg bone showed the presence of collagen.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... actual tissue remains in the fossils of Tyrannosaurus rex T. rex, a dinosaur. Th...
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Line 5, column 82, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s around the presence of blood vessels. The instructor cast doubt about this theory...
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Line 9, column 97, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eres that could be the red blood cells. Once again the professor was not convinced a...
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Line 9, column 239, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... which they found near this fossil they dont have spheres than how come this fossil ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 330.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88181818182 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27046554127 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472727272727 0.540411800872 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 469.8 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.148025469 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.55 110.228320801 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06452816374 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.27373068433 304% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.464264697311 0.272083759551 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135556249907 0.0996497079465 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787666140795 0.0662205650399 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273017238031 0.162205337803 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590540330698 0.0443174109184 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 53.8541721854 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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