TPO 24- integrated writing task

The reading and the lecture are both contradicting with each other, in terms of evidence remaining in the fossil of Tyrannosaurus, a dinosaur. The author of the reading presented three evidence which shows that fossil might contain remnants of the actual tissue of the animal. However, the lecturer casts doubt about the idea and negates all the idea presented in the passage.
First of all, according to the reading, the presence of the soft flexible organic substance inside the channels might be the remains of the blood vessels of T. rex. On the other hand, the speaker undermines the idea presented in the paragraph. Additionally, she mentions that the soft substance researchers found was not necessarily the remains of the blood vessels, but it could be the trace material produced by the bacterial colonization. Since bacteria often colonize hollow in blood vessels after the living organism died. Hence, this could be the cause of the same bacterial colonization.
Secondly, the author in the paragraph suggests that the presence of the spheres in the inner bone contained dark red center which shows that it could be the remains of the red blood cells. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes this idea by asserting that the iron-containing sphere was also found in some primitive animals at the same location who did not contain red cells in the body. Hence, this sphere might have a different origin, or it might have come from the reddish mineral in the soil.
Finally, it is mentioned in the article that the scientists have found out the collagen on the dinosaur's leg which is usually a part of the bone tissue. Although here, the professor also disagrees with the suggestion and describes that collagen cannot last longer than a thousand years and the dinosaurs fossils were around seventy thousand million years ago. Therefore, it is not possible that the collagen has lasted longer in the dinosaur’s fossils for a long duration of time. Instead, the possible explanation is that the collagen might have come from the skin of researchers who were handling the bone of the dinosaur. Thus, the suggestion is also not acceptable.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1373.03311258 131% => OK
No of words: 357.0 270.72406181 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02801120448 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70697242456 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490196078431 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 419.366225166 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2813612458 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.1875 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 7.06452816374 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433061819717 0.272083759551 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11834842403 0.0996497079465 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893420579903 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220237004575 0.162205337803 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651523721399 0.0443174109184 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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