TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him

The passage supports the veracity about the expedition made by Robert E. Peary, an adventurer and explorer who reached the North Pole in 1909. On the other hand, according to the lecture, the reading is not convincing enough and there are not solid evidences for that Peary actually reached the North Pole.

First, the investigation did not show the records carefully once it took only two days, so the committee could not present a trustful conclusion about it. However, the author states after the investigation, the committee concluded that Peary’s accounts were consistent and persuasive, declaring that he had, in fact, reached the North Pole. Moreover, besides the fact that it is true that the National Geographic Society committee declared that Peary indeed reached the North Pole, the committee were not completely objective, once it was composed by Peary’s closest friends who financially contributed to his trip.

Second, the passage mentions that Peary’s claim that he reached the North Pole in only 37, going against the Skeptics, who argued that Peary could not travel that fast, since advanced snowmobiles take longer to cover the same distance. But in a recent expedition, the same trek was completed by the explorer Tom Avery in less than 37 days using the same kind of dogsled and number of dogs Peary had. Nevertheless, according to the professor, Avery carried less weight than Peary, once he was not carrying food on the sled, which was dropped by airplane, not forgetting to mention that Avery faced highly favorable weather conditions if compared to Peary’s, hence, Avery’s expedition was too different from Peary’s to provide support to Peary’s claims.

As last, to support Peary’s claim that he has indeed reached the North Pole, the author mentions the shadows in his photographs, which when measured, could calculate the position in the sun that corresponded to the position of the sun in the North Pole. However, the professor states that photographs do not prove anything. Scientists use techniques to determinate the sun’s position measuring the shadows in the photographs. Without a precise measurement of the shadows, it is not possible to know the sun’s exact position. In light of this, Pear’s photographs came from a primitive camera, and are fuzzy and fade due the time. This results in a blur that do not allow scientists to calculate the sun’s position with accuracy, which can not prove that such photographs were, in fact, took on North Pole.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, as to, in fact, kind of, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 12.0772626932 190% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1373.03311258 156% => OK
No of words: 407.0 270.72406181 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27027027027 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87170511907 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 145.348785872 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515970515971 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 419.366225166 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 2.5761589404 388% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.9208782076 49.2860985944 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.0 110.228320801 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1333333333 21.698381199 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 7.06452816374 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.543819735721 0.272083759551 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.190795716633 0.0996497079465 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132302117287 0.0662205650399 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344561794184 0.162205337803 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432961422342 0.0443174109184 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.3589403974 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 63.6247240618 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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