TPO 29-Integrated writing

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TPO 29-Integrated writing

The main idea of both the passage and the talk is about Edmontosaurus which survived in the North Slope winter during cold winter. In the text, the author mentions that migration to more temperate zones to find food as a possible reason for their survival. The lecturer, on the other hand, challenges all the mentioned arguments and believes that none of them is convincing.

Firstly, the author states Edmontosaurus's diet to support migration hypothesis since plants, which were necessary for Edmontosaurs survival, could not grow in harsh climate. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that there were a lot of dead plants for Edmontosaurus as food sources to eat in the dark and cold North Slope winter. Moreover, she further explains that the climate was very warmer than nowadays in the North Slope in the past, and plant had excellent chance to grow in summer by accessing to sun's energy.

Moreover, the author asserts that Edmontosaurus lived in herd which can be a strong support for their migration to other places. The speaker, in the contrary, points out that animals may live in herd to gain other advantages such as being protected by predators. Besides, she says that some animals, such as modern Rozevelt elk have been living in herd in forest in the United state, but they do not migrate to other locations.

Eventually, the reading passage holds the opinion that Edmontosaurus were capable of migrating long distances. On the other hand, the lecturer posits that all the Edmontosaurus were not adults to migrate long distances. Furthermore, juvenile were not able to have a long journey, and they would slow down all other members in Edmontosaurus herd. Thus, adults Edmontosaurus had not abandon their offspring in cold climate.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'sun'.
Suggestion: sun
...hance to grow in summer by accessing to suns energy. Moreover, the author asserts...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... summer by accessing to suns energy. Moreover, the author asserts that Edmontosaurus ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 382, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'abandoned'.
Suggestion: abandoned
...erd. Thus, adults Edmontosaurus had not abandon their offspring in cold climate.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, may, moreover, so, thus, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06551724138 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74154196004 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544827586207 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4162133774 49.2860985944 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.0 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355596787992 0.272083759551 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11892112277 0.0996497079465 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548361868282 0.0662205650399 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20107117291 0.162205337803 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345166470788 0.0443174109184 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.3589403974 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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