TPO 30 Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture are both about a device called (burning mirror) which Greeks defended against the Roman attack by.
The author in the text provides three reasons to prove that this device was impossible to be used by Greeks in that time. On the other hand, the professor in the lecture posits some explanations to reject each notion one by one.
First of all, the author argues that Greeks technology was not in a high level to produce such an advanced device. They could not prepare a huge sheet of copper to make the burning mirror due to lack of such technology. In contrast, the professor in the lecture posits that they did not have to make a wide and single large sheet of copper, instead they combined small sheets of copper and made a large one to produce a burning mirror.
Secondly, the author contends that an experiment was held to make it sure if it possible to make such device or not, so, the experiment shows that it would take a 10 minutes to set the wooden object on fire. Hence, it is not possible that the Roman's sheep was stable until the fire catches their sheep. On the other hand, the professor challenges the idea by asserting that 10 minute would be feasible for woody boat, however their boat was not made of only wood but also made of a material called (pitch) to make the boat waterproof. As a result the pitch catches the fire for a second.
Finally, it is mentioned in the text that they had a device called (flaming arrow) that does the same fire, so they do not have to make the similar one. The instructor on contrary argues that Romans were aware of such device and were ready to put out that fire, therefore, this device was made because it is not visible until the fire catches. So, it is kind of surprising for the enemy.

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Average: 8.2 (2 votes)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in contrast, kind of, as a result, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 327.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4128440367 5.08290768461 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19651923766 2.5805825403 85% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483180428135 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 466.2 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6869741124 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.06452816374 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332185389016 0.272083759551 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111271331887 0.0996497079465 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057576621382 0.0662205650399 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170192254503 0.162205337803 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568457721512 0.0443174109184 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 53.8541721854 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 12.2367328918 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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