TPO 30 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecturer are both contradicting with each other, in terms of the story of burning mirror whether it was used by Roman soldiers or not. The author of the article states that burning mirror was just a myth, and it was never built by Greeks of Syracuse. Also, the author presents three theories in support of the story. However, the lecturer casts doubt about the claim and rejected all the theories presented in the article.
First of all, according to the article, since it would have required a very precise and special technology for manufacturing a burning mirror, and Greeks were not technologically advanced. Hence, it was not possible that they could have made such a device. On the contrary, the speaker negates the argument presented in the paragraph. Furthermore, she discusses that researchers have found a few small flat pieces which were arranged in parabolic shape which proves that the burning mirror was made by Greek people.
Secondly, the author posits that Greek army needed a long time to set the fire on the ship, and the ship must have not moving at the same time in order to set the fire which sounds very impractical and ineffective. Although the lecturer refutes this by asserting that the ships contained the sticky material such as pitch, and that can catch the fire within a second. Hence, once the burning starts, it can easily spread all over the device and make it possible to fire the mirror even though the ship is moving.
Finally, it is mentioned in the article that Greek had no reason to build a weapon like a burning mirror since they were using a flaming arrow which was serving the same purpose. On the other hand, the speaker again opposes the idea and describes that burning mirror had influenced the Greek soldiers. Once, while traveling through the ship, they had observed that mirror started firing the whole ship. Consequently, they started using the burning mirror after that experience.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, second, secondly, so, while, such as, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 334.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8622754491 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44537291346 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526946107784 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 419.366225166 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4887083064 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.266666667 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0666666667 7.06452816374 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485095720362 0.272083759551 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148170607837 0.0996497079465 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889571610531 0.0662205650399 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275165652785 0.162205337803 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510564546125 0.0443174109184 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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