TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

The reading passage holds three theories of the carves stones, but the professor said that all of them were not convincing.

First of all, the professor said that the if the carved stone balls were weapons, there must be some signs on the stone balls just like the signs on am arrow. If carved stones balls were weapons, there must be some signs of use. They might have some cracks. They might become pieces as well. However, the surface of these stones are very well and there are no where damaged.

Secondly, the professor said that the masses of the stones were different. Although the size of the stones were the same, they were different kinds of stones. She listed three kinds of stones carved stone balls might be and they are all in different densities. So the stones with the same size are with different weight. Therefore, it is not impossible that the carved stone balls were used for measures.

Thirdly, the professor thought that the stone balls were unlikely served a social purpose. The patterns of the carving was extremely simple. Moreover, when people died, some of their possess was buried with them. However, no carved stone balls was found in tombs or in graves. So the stones were not used for status.

Votes
Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'arrowed'.
Suggestion: arrowed
...e stone balls just like the signs on am arrow. If carved stones balls were weapons, ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ow. If carved stones balls were weapons, there must be some signs of use. They mi...
^^
Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...hese stones are very well and there are no where damaged. Secondly, the profess...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1018.0 1373.03311258 74% => OK
No of words: 215.0 270.72406181 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73488372093 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.10961896036 2.5805825403 82% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 145.348785872 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483720930233 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 306.0 419.366225166 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 21.2450331126 61% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2642894699 49.2860985944 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.625 110.228320801 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.4375 21.698381199 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.488509962577 0.272083759551 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.190607953285 0.0996497079465 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991798924345 0.0662205650399 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302816162111 0.162205337803 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11317349105 0.0443174109184 255% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 13.3589403974 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 53.8541721854 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.0289183223 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.56 12.2367328918 78% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.42419426049 82% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 63.6247240618 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.498013245 69% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 7.0 11.2008830022 62% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.