TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

In this set of materials, the author of the reading passage explains three hypotheses of the carved stone balls meaning found in Scotland. However, the professor thinks that the author's theories contain some defects.

First of all, the author claims that the carved stone balls were probably used as weapons for hunting and fighting due to their inside have some holes and the balls easy for people to swing and throw it. On the contrary, the professor disagrees. She thinks that if the function of the balls had been used as weapons, the surface of the balls would have contained some damaged instead of smooth.

In addition, the author states that the balls were all in the same size, 70 mm in diameter, it is possible that it provided the function of the standard of the weight. However, the professor refutes the author's idea by indicating that although the size of the balls is all the same, the weights of the balls are totally different. Because the stone balls were made of the different types of rocks such as sand rocks, calcite or other rocks, and every rock has different density.

Finally, the author raises the point that according to the carved stone balls designed, it is possible that it shows that the social status of their society. On the other hand, the professor asserts that the designs on the balls are too simple to represent the social status. Furthermore, if the balls had shown the symbol of the social status, it would have been discovered at the tomb or grave.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the stone balls are a different weight. Because the stone balls were made of the differ...
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Line 7, column 274, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...tatue. And if the stone balls had shown the symbolize of the statue, it would have been disco...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, so, well, in addition, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1167.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 247.0 270.72406181 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72469635628 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19871978653 2.5805825403 85% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493927125506 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 349.2 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7572365636 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3571428571 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6428571429 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.495103885912 0.272083759551 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187738281224 0.0996497079465 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100385004225 0.0662205650399 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301463859854 0.162205337803 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0985710345969 0.0443174109184 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.3589403974 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 53.8541721854 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 63.6247240618 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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