TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

The reading and the speaker discuss the use of Carved stone balls, which is a type of artifact that found in Scotland from different perspectives. The author of the reading believes that people use the carved stone balls for three purposes However, the speaker casts doubt on the claims made in the article. He says that none of the ideas are convincing.
First of all, the author of the reading points out that because the surface of the carved stone balls have holes and grooves, they could use as weapon in hunting or fighting. This point is challenged by the speaker. He restates the fact that hunting weapons often contain the wears in their surface in order to attack the preys. Meanwhile, the surface of the carved stone balls show no wears or damages.
Secondly, the author of the reading contends that because the carved stone balls are uniform in size, they could be used to weigh or measure things. The speaker rebuts this reason by saying that the carved stone balls are identical in size but they are not the same massive due to the fact that they made from different material. Actually, some stone balls made from sand and some made from stone. Therefore, the density are totally different each other. As a result, they cannot use to measure or weight things.
Finally, the author of the reading states that the carved stone balls might be important social status of their owners. The speaker, on the other hand, opposes this point by saying that the carved stone balls look to simple. It cannot use as a social dignity of their owners. Moreover, according to the tradition of the Neolithic people when people die they tend to bury their possession with their bodies in tomb. However, when scientists unearthed the graves there, they found nothing in the tombs.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the use of Carved stone balls, which is a type of artifact that found in Scotlan...
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Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: uniform
...that because the carved stone balls are uniform in size, they could be used to weigh or measure...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as a result, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 309.0 270.72406181 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76375404531 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1957350468 2.5805825403 85% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462783171521 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3705550291 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5882352941 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.457687917825 0.272083759551 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15267247642 0.0996497079465 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104253899071 0.0662205650399 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293334704945 0.162205337803 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532313848569 0.0443174109184 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 53.8541721854 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.0289183223 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.2367328918 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.42419426049 85% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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