TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

The reading passage states three plausible theories account for the purpose and meaning of carved stone balls which found in Scotland, whereas the professor points out that these explanations are not convincing.

Firstly, the author insists that the balls were used as weapons for hunting and fighting. The speaker, however, argues that the weapons dating from Neolithic period show signs of wear, and if these stone balls were weapons, they should also show those signs. In addition, the balls should be crack and pieces like other weapons found in that period, nevertheless, those balls are well preserved with no significant damage.

Secondly, the reading says that the balls are so uniform in size that they could be used as standard weights to measure quantities. In contrast, the lecture reckons that they cannot be used to measure since they were made of different stone with various weights. Although two balls seem like the same size, they virtually possess varied weights, in this way, they must have other functions.

Lastly, the author states that these balls might possess a social purpose due to their elaborate design. On the contrary, the professor deems that it is not reasonable for them to serve such a purpose, because some balls have intricate patterns while other balls' motif are too simple to present social status. For instance, individual possessing a high-ranking would be buried with his possession, and these balls were not found in any graves. Therefore, they cannot be used to present social status.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: uniform
... the reading says that the balls are so uniform in size that they could be used as standard wei...
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Line 7, column 258, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'balls'' or 'ball's'?
Suggestion: balls'; ball's
...lls have intricate patterns while other balls motif are too simple to present social ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for instance, in addition, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1290.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 249.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18072289157 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4003233601 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574297188755 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 375.3 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4661631965 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.272727273 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6363636364 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.1818181818 7.06452816374 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446202636609 0.272083759551 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168644252107 0.0996497079465 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344272715296 0.0662205650399 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256059698643 0.162205337803 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389178914915 0.0443174109184 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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