TPO-34 - Integrated Writing Task A huge marine mammal known as Steller’s sea cow once lived in the waters around Bering Island off the coast of Siberia. It was described in 1741 by Georg W. Steller, a naturalist who was among the first Europeans to see

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TPO-34 - Integrated Writing Task A huge marine mammal known as Steller’s sea cow once lived in the waters around Bering Island off the coast of Siberia. It was described in 1741 by Georg W. Steller, a naturalist who was among the first Europeans to see

THE passage mentioned some point of evidence which is the main cause of sea cows extinction while the professor in the lecture refute all of the reasons.

First, according to the passage native siberian by over hunting the sea cows cause to extinction of them but lecturer states that the fetures of those animals are masive. he said that they were nine meter in hight and 10 tons in weight althouh they can not prey them by themselves. More over he mentioned that the siberian people's population were large and they didn't need to hunt them.

Second, In the passage autor assert that one of the important main cause of decline the seacows population was about the enviromental disturbances by which they haven't good resorces of food while the professor said that wales was becaming

Third, according to the text, Europian fur trades it can be the last cause of the extinction, they killed animals by their lar wepons. However the lecturer states that Eroupian came to the island after the 1768 in which those animals is extincted.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ile the professor in the lecture refute all of the reasons. First, according to the p...
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Line 4, column 172, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...he fetures of those animals are masive. he said that they were nine meter in hight...
^^
Line 4, column 363, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... peoples population were large and they didnt need to hunt them. Second, In the ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...enviromental disturbances by which they havent good resorces of food while the profess...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 239, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e professor said that wales was becaming Third, according to the text, Europian f...
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Line 10, column 136, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...hey killed animals by their lar wepons. However the lecturer states that Eroupian came ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, second, so, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 868.0 1373.03311258 63% => OK
No of words: 178.0 270.72406181 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87640449438 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 4.04702891845 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38559727517 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 145.348785872 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561797752809 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 419.366225166 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.3461640821 49.2860985944 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.666666667 110.228320801 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6666666667 21.698381199 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28267987651 0.272083759551 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136476675707 0.0996497079465 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948595698864 0.0662205650399 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166976983973 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445979065775 0.0443174109184 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.3589403974 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 53.8541721854 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 63.6247240618 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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