TPO-34 - Integrated Writing Task A huge marine mammal known as Steller’s sea cow once lived in the waters around Bering Island off the coast of Siberia. It was described in 1741 by Georg W. Steller, a naturalist who was among the first Europeans to see

The reading passage and the lecture are both discussing the possible causes of the sea cows extinction. The author of the snippet believes that there are some evidences which are possibly could influence on the decline of this animals. However, the lecturer considers that the statements made in the reading fragment are wrong. He reinforces his opinion by providing three important examples.
First of all, there is indicated in the reading fragment that the population of the sea cows could decrease as a result of group of Siberian people, which overhounted the sea cows. However, the speaker asserts that the sea cows are tremendously big, so the small Siberian villagies didn’t need to hunt and kill a lot of animals to feed themselves. Consequently, the Siberian people are not the significant cause of the sea cow’s population decline.
The subsequent argument of the lecturer is related to the statement made in the exerpt that some ecosystem’s disturbances led to the decreasing of the kelp the main food resource of the sea cows. The lecturer disputes this by claiming that if there were some severe changes in the climate, its would affect on the other animals and ecosystem as a whole.
Finally, thre is denoted in the snippet that the main cause of the sea cows disappearence is the fur traders. Although the lecturer agrees with that after arrival of the Europeans the sea cows’ population dramatically increased. However, he states that before this the population had already benn small. Correspondingly, the speaker doesn’t agree that the fur traders was the most significant cause of the sea cows extinction.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...sibly could influence on the decline of this animals. However, the lecturer consider...
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Line 3, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... The subsequent argument of the lecturer is related to the statement made in the ...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in the exerpt that some ecosystem's disturbances led to the decreasing of th...
^^
Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ere some severe changes in the climate, its would affect on the other animals and e...
^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...evere changes in the climate, its would affect on the other animals and ecosystem as a wh...
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Line 4, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...with that after arrival of the Europeans the sea cows' population dramatical...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, if, so, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 268.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17910447761 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94731717797 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 430.2 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9422660272 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.769230769 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 7.06452816374 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417151322175 0.272083759551 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158276367966 0.0996497079465 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112480459655 0.0662205650399 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250132634661 0.162205337803 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104564254153 0.0443174109184 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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