TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task

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TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task

The main idea of both the passage and the talk is about glass windows' effects on birds. In the text, the author claims that there are some viable solutions which should be contemplated to lessen the bird's injury by glass windows. The lecturer challenges all the solutions mentioned in the reading. He is of the opinion that none of these methods is effective.

Firstly, the reading passage holds the view that using one-way glass rather than regular windows is very practical because the birds are able to distinguish the clear side of them. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that one-way glass has some negative consequences. Moreover, he argues that one-way glass is like a mirror and reflects shine. Therefore, if the birds see the picture of either sky or trees in these glass, they will fly towards them.

In addition, the author asserts that implementing colorful lines or other patters on regular windows will dwindle the birds' injuries. The lecturer, on the other hand, rebuts this solution and posits that these lines or patterns have some flaws. Besides, he says that the birds will consider these lines as an hole and strive to fly through them. Thus, the will be injured.

Eventually, the author mentions artificial magnetic filed which is called magnetic compass as a solution to control the birds direction. The lecturer, however, dismisses this idea by pointing out that birds utilize magnetic filed when they want to transfer from one place to other places which are far such as migration from warm places to cold one. Moreover, rarely have they been used magnetic field for short distances and in most of the cases, the birds use their eyes to navigation. Therefore , these solution will not be effective.

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Average: 5.3 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...ch should be contemplated to lessen the birds injury by glass windows. The lecturer c...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... none of these methods is effective. Firstly, the reading passage holds the v...
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Line 3, column 320, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Moreover, he argues that one-way glass is like a mirror and reflects shine. The...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e glass, they will fly towards them. In addition, the author asserts that imp...
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Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... the birds will consider these lines as an hole and strive to fly through them. Th...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ugh them. Thus, the will be injured. Eventually, the author mentions artifici...
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Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...ic compass as a solution to control the birds direction. The lecturer, however, dismi...
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Line 7, column 503, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... use their eyes to navigation. Therefore , these solution will not be effective. ...
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Line 7, column 506, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this solution' or 'these solutions'?
Suggestion: this solution; these solutions
...e their eyes to navigation. Therefore , these solution will not be effective.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, conversely, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in addition, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 291.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98281786942 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41736190533 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 145.348785872 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549828178694 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8751249998 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.625 110.228320801 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1875 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433395095069 0.272083759551 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128834268937 0.0996497079465 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631539822799 0.0662205650399 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245904645498 0.162205337803 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543158728898 0.0443174109184 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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