TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The reading passage and the lecture are both discussindg the possible solutions to prevent injuries of the birds, which harm themselves while trying to fly through the glass window. The author of the snippet presents the three solutions how people can modify their windows. However, the lecturer considers this solutions ineffective. He reinforces his opinion by providing several examples.
First of all, there is indicated in the reading fragment that the one way glass could be a good replacement for the regular one. However, the speaker asserts that the one way glasses reflects light like a mirrors. Consequently, birds will think that the mirror is just a continuation of the sky and will still try to fly through it.
The subsequent lecturer’s argument is related to the solution presented in the excerpt that the window could be stripes with the colorful line as a part of the design. The lecturer disputes this approach by claiming that birds will percept the glass gabs between the stripes as a holes into which they can fly. Therefore, people need to make really small holes, but it will make a dark atmosphere inside the rooms.
Finally, there is denoted in the reading fragment that another solution is the make artificial magnetic field to distract and guide bird away from buildings. But the lecturer considers that the problem of this solution is connected to the fact that birds use their inner magnetic compass only during the migration period. Moreover,the speaker states that they usually fly in the sity guided by their vision.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...indows. However, the lecturer considers this solutions ineffective. He reinforces hi...
^^^^
Line 2, column 203, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a mirror' or simply 'mirrors'?
Suggestion: a mirror; mirrors
...the one way glasses reflects light like a mirrors. Consequently, birds will think that th...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a hole' or simply 'holes'?
Suggestion: a hole; holes
...t the glass gabs between the stripes as a holes into which they can fly. Therefore, peo...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 330, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ly during the migration period. Moreover,the speaker states that they usually fly in...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, while, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 257.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07003891051 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60470309065 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575875486381 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 387.9 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7893999457 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.230769231 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411872901501 0.272083759551 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123187381831 0.0996497079465 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717902453741 0.0662205650399 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228519919052 0.162205337803 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464988229535 0.0443174109184 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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