TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task

The reading and lecture both discuess the foundation of bee as 200 million years ago. While the reading provides three calims to support the idea that there was not any bee as 200 million years ago, the professor refutes saying, none of these calims are convincing.

Firstly, the article avers that the researchers could not find fossil of bee that might be dated to 200 million years ago. In fact, they would able to find fossil only dated 100 million years old. On the other hand, the professor rejects this notion by saying that this is true that there is no fossil remain it is origin as 200 million old. This is because these fossils preserved by tree sticky materials. However, these trees were very rare. So, the fossil could not be preserved at that time. As a result, the absence of the fossil does not mean that the bee did not exist in that time period. Consequently, if there was risen substance, the fossil could be preserved.

Secondly, the reading mentions that there was not flowering plants at 200 million years, which is very close to the modern bee. Also, the first appearnce of flowering was just 125 years ago. However, the professor argues this point by saying that there is a strong relation between plant flowering and bee, but the early bee did not feed on flowering plants. Besides, the early bees fed on other plants like farns and pine trees. Furthermore, when these flowering plants appeared, bees started to adapt their feeding on them.

Lastly, the article states that the fossilizes structures found in Arizona are matched with the modern bees nest chamvers, but it was missing cover caps. Nevertheless, the professor contradicts this idea by explaining that the old fossil chamber missed the caps, but the chemical evidence states that the modern bees built the chambers which is water proof substances. In addition, the analysis of specific chemical composition of old fossilized chambers conifrmed that these nests contains the same water proof materials.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 346, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...modern bees built the chambers which is water proof substances. In addition, the analysis o...
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Line 7, column 501, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...rmed that these nests contains the same water proof materials.
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, in addition, in fact, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 337.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93471810089 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37854513355 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 145.348785872 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504451038576 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 481.5 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6532198572 49.2860985944 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3888888889 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94444444444 7.06452816374 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.27373068433 281% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0630988165644 0.272083759551 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269351619483 0.0996497079465 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0222587211485 0.0662205650399 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0361137718972 0.162205337803 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285762004604 0.0443174109184 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 53.8541721854 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.0289183223 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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