TPO-45 - Integrated Writing Task Any student of paleontology will be struck by the fact that a great many animals of the past were considerably larger than they are today. This holds true for species ranging from dinosaurs to most mammals. Just why they w

The article states that skeptics doubt that structures like nest that found near Arizona were created by bees and provides three reasons of support. Conversely, the professor states that the structures that have discovered perfectely possible were bees nests about 200 million years ago. She refutes each of the author’s reasons.

First, the reading claims that no fossils remains of actual bees that dated about 200 millions years ago have ever found. The porfessor says that its true, but the reason why no actual fossils found because its not preserved. SHe explains that bees fossils are preserved by trees raisins. This raisin was very rare 200 million years ago and it came later. And so, this fact of not finding any fossils belong to that era does not mean these nests were not built by bees. The professor concludes that bees existed 200 millions years ago, but their fossils did not preserved due to the lack of raisin.

Second, the article claims that absences of flowering plants in that period highly doubt the exisitence of bees, since both of them use to be close to each other. However, the professor refutes this point by saying that this close relationship can be seen today. But, it would not be 200 million years ago. The professor states that before the evloutionary period, bees could be feeding on non flowering plants, such as fern, pine trees. After that, they adopted other plants for feeding when the evalotution happened. Therefore, the professor emphasizes that bees could be existed before flowering plants; and as a result they created those structures.

Third, the reading posits that the fossilized chambers for those sturctures lack caps that silimlarily made by modern bees which could explains they not built by bees. On the other hand, the professor states that even though they lack spiral, those structures have fossilized chemicals composition as they modern bees have. She explains that modern bees use a water- proof chemical substance which helps them from water. And so, this disictive chemcial substance have been found in fossilized structures. And this means. those sturctures that have been discovered is clearly idenicated that bees built them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'preserve'
Suggestion: preserve
...ns years ago, but their fossils did not preserved due to the lack of raisin. Second, t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... exisitence of bees, since both of them use to be close to each other. However, the...
^^^
Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'explain'
Suggestion: explain
...mlarily made by modern bees which could explains they not built by bees. On the other ha...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 522, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Those
... fossilized structures. And this means. those sturctures that have been discovered is...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, however, second, so, therefore, third, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 12.0772626932 215% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 22.412803532 223% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 1373.03311258 135% => OK
No of words: 360.0 270.72406181 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13333333333 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38769996254 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 145.348785872 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 532.8 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 3.25607064018 307% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.51434878587 396% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9349907706 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.27373068433 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0955428674775 0.272083759551 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357347191648 0.0996497079465 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0256311304783 0.0662205650399 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601938951841 0.162205337803 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297143633835 0.0443174109184 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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