TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa
The passage discusses that currently medical information about patients has been recorded and stored on paper forms. The passage suggests if doctors use electronic databases for recording their pationt's data, it will have many advantages than paper-based recording. The passage provides three reasons to support this. However, the professor rejects all these reasons and says these reasons are uncertain.
First, the article claims that by using electronic records they can reduce the costs of recording. Also, by having all pationts' recordes computerized doctors can easily have access to this data from anywhere. In contrast, the professor explains if doctors use computers for recording their pationts' documents and data they will record these documents on papers, too. So, they have to pay cost for storage space. In addition, there is a possibility they need these paper records for different purposes. So, they still need to have paper records. As a result, reducing cost is not practical.
Second, the article argues that electronic medical records are essential in decreasing the medical errors because their hand writings are not good. While the professor rejects this reason by describing that doctors use pen and paper for taking note during the treatment of the patient and their staff put the records into computers. So, still there is a possibility that errors occure. As you can see, the mentioned reason in reading is unconvincing.
Third, the article states that electronic medical records can be very influential in medical researches. Since researchers easily have access to many records. Furthermore, searching between papers and finding data can be very time consuming but using electronic recors is not only time-saving but also an efficient way to collect data. In spite of this reason, the professor describes that access to patients' records is not possible for other people. If someone want to look at to these records, they can have patient's permission. Also, there are many other strict rules to having this acces. As a result, electronic medical records have nothing to do with researchers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 267, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... advantages than paper-based recording. The passage provides three reasons to suppo...
Line 4, column 105, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...very influential in medical researches. Since researchers easily have access to many ...
Line 4, column 462, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
...t possible for other people. If someone want to look at to these records, they can h...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, so, still, third, while, in addition, in contrast, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1373.03311258 130% => OK
No of words: 335.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33432835821 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64318876929 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510447761194 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 419.366225166 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 13.0662251656 168% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.347052289 49.2860985944 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2272727273 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2272727273 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.541893689703 0.272083759551 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16292469904 0.0996497079465 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115946908359 0.0662205650399 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.34899312523 0.162205337803 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385053211644 0.0443174109184 87% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.04 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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