TPO 46 : Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage.

Essay topics:

TPO 46 : Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage.

The lecturer disagrees with the reading passage and presents three points to defend his opinion.

First, she states the use of electronic records does not reduce costs because doctors often keep the medical records for their own. Therefore, saving the electronic records lead to a increase of costs.

Second, the reading states that the electronic records prevent errors for example in handwriting the prescriptions, while the lecturer disagrees. She expresses that usually doctors write the prescriptions and gave them to their secretaries to rewrite them in a systematic manner. Thus, it does not cause any problem.

Finally, the reading passage argues that the electronic records might help researchers to do investigations on the electronic records database. However, the lecturer explains that those kind of database can not be useful for research. Indeed, researchers need to take some permissions to have an access to the records. Nevertheless, maybe a patient was not satisfied to be shared her/his information to the researchers. In other words, access to the electronic records would be time-consuming and would not affected for scientists.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se of electronic records does not reduce costs because doctors often keep the med...
^^
Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
..., saving the electronic records lead to a increase of costs. Second, the rea...
^
Line 9, column 257, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a systematic manner" with adverb for "systematic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...em to their secretaries to rewrite them in a systematic manner. Thus, it does not cause any problem. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 127, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'records'' or 'record's'?
Suggestion: records'; record's
... to do investigations on the electronic records database. However, the lecturer explain...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 181, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'those kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; those kinds
...se. However, the lecturer explains that those kind of database can not be useful for resea...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 294, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...s need to take some permissions to have an access to the records. Nevertheless, maybe a p...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 508, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...s would be time-consuming and would not affected for scientists.
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, kind of, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 30.3222958057 63% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 989.0 1373.03311258 72% => OK
No of words: 177.0 270.72406181 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58757062147 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 4.04702891845 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00114355725 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 145.348785872 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598870056497 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 419.366225166 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2472370525 49.2860985944 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9090909091 110.228320801 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0909090909 21.698381199 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5454545455 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4405436381 0.272083759551 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148206635433 0.0996497079465 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11543067653 0.0662205650399 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230428129129 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1584942936 0.0443174109184 358% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.2367328918 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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