TPO 52

Essay topics

In this set of materials, the reading passage mainly discusses about travelling to asteroids and get some profits from them because of some reasons such as their low gravity, metal sources, and easy accessing to them, While in the listening passage the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text. First of all,in the reading passage, it is clearly stated that asteroids gravity is lower than earth and other plants, so this situation is suitable for spaceships landing and taking off from these asteroids surface. However, the professor believes that this is not true. She claims that asteroids low-gravity can make a lot of health problems like decreasing their muscle mass and their bone density for astronauts who have to tolerate being there for a long time. In addition, the professor disagrees with this idea that transporting the asteroids material sources is a good suggestion. She points out that using them can cause some effect about this business. First, this transporting needs a lot of money because of expensive equipment that is necessary. Second, being a lot of these valuable materials could reduce their prices. Finally, although in this text it is mentioned that sometimes asteroids have short distance from earth and it is a good opportunity too shuttling to them, the professor subscribes to this view that asteroids are moving all the time and they do not have certain position and sometimes reaching to them are easy but coming back to earth is so difficult because they go away from earth.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 322, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...t is presented in the text. First of all,in the reading passage, it is clearly stat...
^^^
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'asteroids'' or 'asteroid's'?
Suggestion: asteroids'; asteroid's
...ding passage, it is clearly stated that asteroids gravity is lower than earth and other p...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, while, in addition, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1273.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 254.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01181102362 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58323224782 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57874015748 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.062673114 49.2860985944 221% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 141.444444444 110.228320801 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2222222222 21.698381199 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06452816374 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.3589403974 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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