TPO 54 Integrated Writing

The reading passage talks about, The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. Because of that salt it has ordinary people thinks about how they can stop it to save the fishes life but in naturally, the lake's water will soon become so salty that the lake will be unable to support fish and bird populations.

First, one option is direct removal of salt from the lake's water in special desalination facilities. But the lecture said, it makes some problems like as, make some toxin such as Selenium, and if it’s going to people life it’ll dangerous for them.

Second, another possible solution is to watery the salt level in the lake with water from the ocean, bringing ocean water into the lake would decrease the lake’s salinity. But the lecture said it has 100 kilometers and its long distances to do it so it impossible.

Third, yet another solution would be to control the lake's saltiness by constructing walls to divide the lake into the smaller sections. The lecture says, it’s unlikely work, and it has some problem such as biological activates like as earthquake, if it’s happen the water will mix back in.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fishes'' or 'fish's'?
Suggestion: fishes'; fish's
... about how they can stop it to save the fishes life but in naturally, the lakes water ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 53, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
...nother solution would be to control the lakes saltiness by constructing walls to divi...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 301, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...os;s happen the water will mix back in.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, second, so, third, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 12.0772626932 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 968.0 1373.03311258 71% => OK
No of words: 198.0 270.72406181 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88888888889 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50399130426 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 307.8 419.366225166 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4381592778 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 21.698381199 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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