TPO 54 Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture are both about preventing the salinity of the Salton Sea. The author of the reading presents three solutions to decrease the saltiness in the lake water. The lecturer disputes the claims made in the article. Her position is that these three reasons are relatively unrealistic and not practical.

According to the reading, salt can be removed by processing the lake water through desalination facilities. The article mentions that the facilities will pump the water in, evaporate it into steam, leave solid salty materials, and return cooled down water. The lecturer challenges this specific argument.
She claims that this way elevates a serious health risk to human bodies. Additionally, he points out that extracted solid materials are mostly salt, however, also contain toxic chemicals such as selenium, which can be taken into the air by wind and become a danger to humans' breath.

Secondly, the author suggests building pipes and canals to degrade salinity in the lake. The article says that the water from the Pacific Ocean has 20% less salt concentration than the lake. The lecturer, however, asserts that the government is hard to get such abundant resources to complete this construction.
She goes on to say that the Salton Sea is 100 kilometres away from the Pacific Ocean, and building pipelines or canals can be costly.

Finally, the author posits that saltiness can be controlled by building walls to separate the lake. The author contends that while the salinity in small sections upgrades, the main part is controlled by delivering fresh water from small rivers. In contrast, the lecturer’s stance is that this idea is only available for a short time but do not last for long. He notes that the walls are likely to collapse under the frequent and intense geographical activities in the lake region, for example, the earthquake. Hence, the water in small sections will flow back into the large section and mix up with the low salinity water again.

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Average: 7 (2 votes)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...crease the saltiness in the lake water. The lecturer disputes the claims made in th...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 329.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09118541033 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59494730889 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 419.366225166 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6360084999 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0555555556 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2777777778 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440875993503 0.272083759551 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124069343027 0.0996497079465 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112532948028 0.0662205650399 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20858206376 0.162205337803 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105171445742 0.0443174109184 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 63.6247240618 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...crease the saltiness in the lake water. The lecturer disputes the claims made in th...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 329.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09118541033 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59494730889 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 419.366225166 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6360084999 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0555555556 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2777777778 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440875993503 0.272083759551 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124069343027 0.0996497079465 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112532948028 0.0662205650399 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20858206376 0.162205337803 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105171445742 0.0443174109184 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 63.6247240618 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.