TPO 55 Writing 1
Because of climate change, more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry, unusable desert land. There are many proposals about how to stop this process, known as desertification. A number of proposals involve growing trees, because trees can help protect soil and provide many other benefits to fight against desertification. Some scientists have proposed that the best way to grow trees in dry areas in danger of desertification is by using a box-shaped device surrounding the young tree. The device collects water that condenses from vapor in the atmosphere and helps the tree to grow. However, other scientists believe that this device will not be successful in fighting against desertification for the following reasons.
First, at a cost of 25 U S. dollars each, the device would make growing trees a prohibitively expensive process. Meaningful efforts to fight desertification involve growing millions of trees. Some countries most affected by desertification cannot afford to buy devices for millions of trees
Second, plans for fighting desertification involve asking local people to install and maintain the devices. People living in some of the areas most affected by desertification work long days in harsh conditions: sometimes barely managing to provide food for their families. It would be difficult to motivate these people to look after trees that cannot serve as a source of food for them.
Third, the device's ability to collect and conserve water is limited. Each one provides only enough water to keep a small tree alive. Trees that have outgrown the device have to deal with unforgiving environmental conditions on their own. In some places where the devices are being tried, six months can pass without a drop of rain. Once the trees become too big for the device, they may not be able to survive in such a harsh environment.
The reading and the lecture both discuss growing trees in dry areas in danger of desertification by using a box-shaped device surrounding the young tree. While the reading provided many limitations and drawbacks of using these devices, the lecturer refutes the author opinion and states it is worthwhile to use these devices to solve the desertification problem.
First of all, the reading claims that the device is expensive, which might cost 25 US which makes a growing tree by using this method is quite expensive. In addition, many countries are not able to afford to buy such costly devices for a tremendous number of trees. However, the professor casts doubt of the claim made in the reading passage by saying that cost could be a true disadvantage, but once the young tree gets bigger, the device could be removed and used for other trees. Therefore, the device could be used repeatedly for more than 20 times because they are reusable. According to the professor, these devices are much more reasonable than what the reading passage has claimed.
Moreover, the reading states that local people would be required for devices' installment and maintenance. Furthermore, people live in desertification areas are working hard and for long hours to feed their families. Therefore, it is arduous and not reasonable to take care of plants that cannot provide food for them. On the other hand, the lecturer says that it is true that local people are required to maintain and install the devices for plants that they cannot eat. But there is one point that people will be rewarded from maintaining such devices. The first benefit is that. they can collect water for plants not only from trees and can use this water to grow vegetable plants for example. The second benefit is that large trees can be used for firewood which is very beneficial for local people. Therefore, domestic people will be motivated to maintain and install anti- desertification devices.
Finally, the reading posits that there is a restriction on the device's ability to gather and preserve water. Furthermore, some trees become too large for the device, that they may not be able to survive in areas where rain is scared. Nevertheless, the professor argues this by pointing out that devices are beneficial during a harsh environment, such devices surrounding young trees allow the growing of long roots, these roots will absorb water from underground. underneath the desert. consequently, large trees can conserve water in their roots and can survive after the removal of the device. The professor gives an example of Sahara Desert, that has 3000 thrived trees, 3 years after the removal of the devices.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 582, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...uch devices. The first benefit is that. they can collect water for plants not only f...
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Line 6, column 64, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'devices'' or 'device's'?
Suggestion: devices'; device's
...sits that there is a restriction on the devices ability to gather and preserve water. F...
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Line 6, column 465, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Underneath
...ots will absorb water from underground. underneath the desert. consequently, large trees c...
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Line 6, column 488, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Consequently
...rom underground. underneath the desert. consequently, large trees can conserve water in thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 10.4613686534 239% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 1373.03311258 163% => OK
No of words: 444.0 270.72406181 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04504504505 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.04702891845 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6499429944 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 145.348785872 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466216216216 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.0 419.366225166 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 13.0662251656 168% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7198764651 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.818181818 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1818181818 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.59090909091 7.06452816374 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117832747464 0.272083759551 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404343246556 0.0996497079465 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311673423425 0.0662205650399 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763832142037 0.162205337803 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254580537631 0.0443174109184 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 63.6247240618 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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