TPO 55 Writing IntegratedBecause of climate change, more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry, unusable desert land. There are many proposals about how to stop this process, known as desertification.

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TPO 55 Writing Integrated
Because of climate change, more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry, unusable desert land. There are many proposals about how to stop this process, known as desertification. A number of proposals involve growing trees, because trees can help protect soil and provide many other benefits to fight against desertification. Some scientists have proposed that the best way to grow trees in dry areas in danger of desertification is by using a box-shaped device surrounding the young tree. The device collects water that condenses from vapor in the atmosphere and helps the tree to grow. However, other scientists believe that this device will not be successful in fighting against desertification for the following reasons.

Embeding a box-shaped device to maintaine young trees from harsh evironmental conditions is argued in the text. But, there are some persuasive reasons to use this method:
According to the passage, each box cost 25 dollars and, millions boxes are needed to complete desertification process. It means that most of the countries which are in conflict with this problem could not afford such a huge expense. As a justification, when the tree grow up, the box can be used for other young tree, even twenty times. So, the total expense sounds so resonable by dividing the expense to using times.
It is true that protecting from the trees is not the local people's concern because, they prefer to pay attention to useful plants which would be the food sources for them. By the way, they could be persuaded by making them aware of other benefits. For instance, some of the boxes could be used to store water for growing other plants; On the better word, the local people should be permitted to use boxes in their farmlands. Thereby, their time would not be wasted and, the trees would grow up. Moreover,
the broken boxes are used as wood fires.
The containers or the boxes, could not be sufficient if the trees grow up. They have been designed to supply enough water for a young tree unless they are designed bigger which leas to more cost. The trees' roots would be spreaded deeply as well as the trees grow up; So, the roots reach to the moist soils beneath of the dry soils and, the needed amount of water could be absorbed
from underground

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... aware of other benefits. For instance, some of the boxes could be used to store water for ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'root'.
Suggestion: root
...gger which leas to more cost. The trees roots would be spreaded deeply as well as the...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, well, as to, for instance, as well as, by the way, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1273.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 273.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.663003663 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33807546824 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 145.348785872 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553113553114 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3678791623 49.2860985944 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9230769231 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 7.06452816374 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0900980315012 0.272083759551 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361512912107 0.0996497079465 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0244376428635 0.0662205650399 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0532387211333 0.162205337803 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136556671703 0.0443174109184 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 53.8541721854 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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