TPO24

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TPO24

The author considers some pieces of evidence which are known as a new breakthrough. The lecturer, however, refutes the claim about blood vessel by providing some other possible reasons which can be concluded from the discovery.

First, the reading mentions some tiny branching channels which are likely associated with the blood vessels. Nevertheless, the professor casts doubton /over the soft material in the bones. He believes that it is more probably that this soft matter remained due to the bacteria activity since after a creaturedeath, bacteria commence fossilizing the body and releasing a soft substance like the one founded in the hallow.

Second, according to a microscopic examination, there are some spheres that can be a part of red blood cell. On the contrary, the lecturer points out to the other researches which illustrate the primitive animals did not have blood cells. In addition, the red dark center may be caused by other material. For this reason, the origin of the substance may convert from other material like reddish mineral which has the same color.

Third, the presence of collagen can be translated into the fact that there was some kind of living bone tissue. On the other hand, the teacher thinks that it contradicts the previous studies which show that collagen cannot be existed beyond 100000 years ago. Compared with the 70-million-year-old fossil, there is a huge and noticeable gap between these discoveries. Hence, the source of this collagen is probably something else. For instance, collagen found in human’s skin can carry from the researcher’s skin, who handled the fossil, to the bone.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... soft substance like the one founded in the hallow. Second, according to a microscopic ...
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to the other researches which illustrate the primitive animals did not have blood...
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Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., the teacher thinks that it contradicts the previous studies which show that col...
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Line 7, column 562, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n, who handled the fossil, to the bone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, may, nevertheless, second, so, third, for instance, in addition, kind of, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 264.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25757575758 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85306490267 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609848484848 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0032353129 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1428571429 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 7.06452816374 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315755748741 0.272083759551 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992227978006 0.0996497079465 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471982668298 0.0662205650399 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166688575863 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05674700342 0.0443174109184 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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