tpo25

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tpo25

The reading and the lecture are both about vessels which are copper cylinders surrounding an iron rod. The author of the reading believes that this theory about using vessels as electricity batteries is false for some reasons. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article. She thinks that there are some explanation which support this theory.

First of all, the author points out that if vessels were used as batteries, there should be some conductors nearby. Moreover, all vessels should be attached to the conductor, but there were no track of it. This point is challenged by the lecturer. she suggests that vessels were found by local people, so they could suppose that conductor is less interesting thing than vessels.

Secondly, the author contends that those vessels were similar to copper cylinders discovered in the ruins of Seleucia. The article establishes that it was used for holding scrolls of sacred texts, so vessels had the same purposes. The lecturer rebuts this argument. she states that can be true that original purpose of using vessels were to hold scrolls. However, people noticed that it can produce some energy, so vessels were adopted for another purpose.

Finally, the article states that it was meaningless for ancient people to make some vessels, because they did not have any devices. The lecturer, on the other hand, believes that people could use it for healing, because it is common knowledge that small amount of electricity is able to retrieve muscels.

In conclusion, I would like to say that, there are a lot of reasons to deny purpose of vessels, but all of them are able to be disproved.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The reading and the lecture are both about vessels which...
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...ty batteries is false for some reasons. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
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...is point is challenged by the lecturer. she suggests that vessels were found by loc...
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...ses. The lecturer rebuts this argument. she states that can be true that original p...
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... vessels, but all of them are able to be disproved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 276.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99275362319 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46022763516 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554347826087 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7174239693 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.125 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06452816374 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450596901348 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135112989461 0.0996497079465 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875912242706 0.0662205650399 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211179236013 0.162205337803 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10077992928 0.0443174109184 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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