Write an email to a friend from another country asking for information and advice about studying abroad

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Write an email to a friend from another country asking for information and advice about studying abroad.

I will finish my secondary education in two years. I am thinking of continuing my further education in the UK. I want tp consult you about some points.

First, I have heard that the weather in your country is severe with snow and rain. I wonder whether a student in tropical country like me can adapt to it easily. I also concern about your national culture. I think there are a lot of traditional customes that I have never known. Will you tell me some of them in your next email?

Moreover, I am keen on earning money after school time by taking a part-time job at a small restaurant or grocery store. If you have free time, please take me to some places.

I am looking forward to seeing you in the UK.
Regards.

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Average: 6.4 (14 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tinuing my further education in the UK. I want tp consult you about some points. ...
^
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...so concern about your national culture. I think there are a lot of traditional cu...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, moreover, second, so, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 41.998997996 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 590.0 1615.20841683 37% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 135.0 315.596192385 43% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37037037037 5.12529762239 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.4086580994 4.20363070211 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40431710486 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 176.041082164 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.681481481481 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 186.3 506.74238477 37% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.662817693 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 53.6363636364 106.682146367 50% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.2727272727 20.7667163134 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0573595903922 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0226630234911 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0251101254878 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0269844425068 0.151304729494 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327090146959 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.3 13.0946893788 40% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 50.2224549098 152% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 11.3001002004 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.18 12.4159519038 58% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 78.4519038076 31% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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