Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do u support it or not? (Agree/Disagree)

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Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do u support it or not? (Agree/Disagree)

Accomplished people always attract attention of the youngsters and influence them to imitate their actions, which is a positive trend only if the role model is a right person and doing good deeds for society. These days adolescents are being motivated by celebrities’ charm, glamour and outfits only and they even fail to identify their true nature, which is a negative trend as per my opinion.

Celebrities these days focus only on external looks and some of them are even indulged in substance abuse which set a wrong example for the youngsters, moreover the young generation never looks into the uphill struggle those sports person did to reach at their goal, all they observe is their hairstyles, outfits and expensive vehicles they possess.

Making role models is only effective if it provides you motivation, determination, etiquettes, mutual respect and instill positive objective oriented behavior to reach at destination, which is not feasible by projecting celebrities’ life style as it is far away from reality and pragmatism. Adolescents are wasting exorbitant money to become like celebrities and not paying attention towards their education and intellectual skills.

In short, youngsters require a correct pathway to amplify their capabilities and catalyze the surge of achievement and prosperity which cannot be achieved through wrong role models.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...er looks into the uphill struggle those sports person did to reach at their goal, all ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, so, still, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 6.10837438424 16% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 8.36945812808 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 5.94088669951 84% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 31.9359605911 63% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1172.0 1207.87684729 97% => OK
No of words: 212.0 242.827586207 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52830188679 5.00649968141 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.92707691288 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0302703295 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 139.433497537 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646226415094 0.580463131201 111% => OK
syllable_count: 365.4 379.143842365 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.6157635468 22% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6551724138 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.5024630542 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.5883292785 50.4703680194 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 195.333333333 104.977214359 186% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.3333333333 20.9669160288 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.25397266985 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0845275677716 0.242375264174 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410837816867 0.0925447433944 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394249285481 0.071462118173 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.049009936557 0.151781067708 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175580462096 0.0609392437508 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.3 12.6369458128 176% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.49 53.1260098522 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 10.9458128079 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.39 11.5310837438 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.59 8.32886699507 127% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 55.0591133005 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.94827586207 191% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.3980295567 154% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.5123152709 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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