Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (agedfive to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, language,science and history.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (agedfive to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, language,science and history.

Younger school children are already equipped with so many homeworks on math, science, language and history,pass a busy time for a better grade on those subjects and don't get enough time to play and enjoy their life. The growing competition that are observed now a daysin elementary schools are so extensive that young children have little time to pay heed on every math and science they enroll, let alone music and art. The ongoing discussion in the following passage will demonstrate the argument on behalf of taking math, science, literature and history class only.

First, art and music are not an easy subject, they are harder for adult also let alone young children. It requires extensive practice, a dedicated study and reharsal time to learn those. Furthermore, they are different in terms of content from math, science, history and literature. So, children always find it harder to perceive.

Second, learning music and art at the age of five to ten years is not so important as math and sciences. Most of the time children pass to learn science, technology, history and language becuase those are importnat subjects to achieve a good grade. At that age level, we need to teach them what is important for them. May be some of them will be a popular musician or a poet afterwards but this does not mean that they should take musics at their early age. There are several scientists who are proficient riting literature but did not take any subject realted with art at the early study period.

Finally, taking music and art in addition to math, science, history and language will cost an extra mental and psychological pressure to that kids. They are already busy and fully equipped with science and literature. If art and music are given then it will not only be an extra burden for them but also increase tension on their delightful student life.

Though art and music is required for human to understand and enjoy the meaning of life and its beauty, it is not the perfect time to study those subjects at the age level of five to ten. When young children will be in senior class then they can learn some parts of those for their interest. This does not mean that they should learn it from the very beginning of academic life.

In conclusion, art and musis should not be taken by young children in addition to math, science, literature and history.

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The growing competition that are observed
The growing competitions that are observed

Sentence: Finally, taking music and art in addition to math, science, history and language will cost an extra mental and psychological pressure to that kids.
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Sentence: The growing competition that are observed now a daysin elementary schools are so extensive that young children have little time to pay heed on every math and science they enroll, let alone music and art.
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Sentence: It requires extensive practice, a dedicated study and reharsal time to learn those.
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Sentence: Most of the time children pass to learn science, technology, history and language becuase those are importnat subjects to achieve a good grade.
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Sentence: In conclusion, art and musis should not be taken by young children in addition to math, science, literature and history.
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