It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city Do you agree or disagree Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay

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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

Everyplace has its advantages and disadvantage, so it’s hard to choose where you can live either on small country or on a big city. But most people prefer to live on the place where they see that it bring to them more benefits to their life. Some people choose to live and grow up on the small country, but in my point of view I would like to grow up on a big city because I see that a city provides to me all I need.

First of all, big city is suitable place to build up a relationship with new people. City includes many entertainment places that attract the people either from same country or from other one to visit it, and we know it’s the best place that gathers a people of different culture and languages. So it is chance to know new friend and earn new languages and background about others country. For example, when I watched movie in the cinema, I meet a person from North Korea, and he know well about our English language and about USA, we open conservation about many different topic. So from that moment we become close friend and I still in communicate with him. After great effort I learn his language.

Second, big city include many colleges and universities with different department, which provide for its inhabitants a good education. The colleges in small country may not provide includes the purview that is more needed in a labor market, that’s why the city is more preferable for many due to the variety of colleges that include many purview with a teacher of high qualification and knowledge. Since the college is just the stage to prepare the students for future job.

Finally, big city provides more job opportunity than the small country does. City includes a lot of company of different ranges that will help many people and increase their chances to find a good job with a high salary. It’s a good reason that attracts the people to live in city rather than country, because the people whom live in the country find difficulties for having a job suitable with their education and qualification. For example, my friend has civil engineer qualification; he spent one year in searching for new job in his country that allows him to work with his certification, and he didn't find any one. So he moved to the city and he finally work in the biggest civil engineering company.

To sum up, some people believe that the country is the best place to live and grow up, but after I saw how many the benefits that the city can bring to the human life, I strongly agree to live on the city without any hesitation.

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Sentence: But most people prefer to live on the place where they see that it bring to them more benefits to their life.
Description: The fragment it bring to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace bring with verb, past tense

Sentence: So it is chance to know new friend and earn new languages and background about others country.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to others and country

Sentence: So from that moment we become close friend and I still in communicate with him.
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Suggestion: Refer to in and communicate

Sentence: Second, big city include many colleges and universities with different department, which provide for its inhabitants a good education.
Description: The fragment city include many is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace include with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular

Sentence: The colleges in small country may not provide includes the purview that is more needed in a labor market, that's why the city is more preferable for many due to the variety of colleges that include many purview with a teacher of high qualification and knowledge.
Description: A verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to provide and includes

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