TOEFL integrated writing: Dutch painter Rembrandt

The reading passage casts doubts on the fact that Rembrandt painting, which is a painting of an elderly lady, is virtually painted by Rembrandt. On the other hand, the listening passage confirms that the painting was examined by experts, who assures that the painting inevitably is his.

First of all, the professor advocates that the fur collar which the woman is wearing was not part of the original painting that was investigated by experts. However, it was added one hundred years after the painting was accomplished. According to the professor it could have been added by someone who wanted to...

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Sentence: Finally, The professor quotes that the wood panels which the reading passage mentions were on the back of the painting, were also added to make the work look more grand.
Description: The fragment work look more is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace look with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular

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