Observation about important things/places

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Observation about important things/places

In our childhood memories, we still have some places or things which we can’t never ever forget easily during this life. Me either. I used to have a childhood very ingenuous and serene with a place, which still is the most meaningful place for me so far. And it nurtured me growing up until now. Nothing else, that’s my house, which people often call is ‘Heaven on earth”.

I’ve been living far away from it for 5 months. That’s not such a long time, but it’s enough for me to know how much i love it. A variety of memories between me and this house happened. And in every sad or happy moments of me are always have it stayed beside me. Sharing and grow up. What a beautiful thing! In during past years, when my family was very poor, it wasn’t beautiful like now. It was a small decrepit house. And its big just equaled two classrooms add up with a big yard covered. Although it was very old, it protected my family during more than 5 years. Every years in flood season, it had tolerated too much in order not let my family’s members don’t feel cold or stick rain. Even there still had some holes, but it’s okay, i could help it by fixing them like sharing its difficulty. Lunar new year , one of the big and important events in our country, it nearly like Christmas in here, an occasion for family can gather around, share everything we did in last year and exchange New Year’s wishes. Children will receive red envelop with money insides from adults. And we also go to flower markets, pagoda for praying, decide who will first foot the house by hoping that can bring lucky to the house, see dragon dance performance on the street,..etc and it takes until 10 days. Besides, my house is also decorated by my mother and me. It always looks more beautiful and gorgeous in New Year’s Eve. My father always buys more some New Year trees like Apricot blossom, Peach blossom, Marigold to make sure our house looks full of everything like hoping my house will be full happiness and lucky in a year. Time quietly drifting, this house always full of laughter and optimism. Gratutidually, my parent built a solid career and also have good social positions by their perseverance. We decided to beat this old house and build another new one nicer and more elegant. Me and my brother was helping my dad to design this house is going to be. I was very happy so much because this is the first time i have my own room. When the preparations were done, we move to another house was quite far away. Me and my brother were very exited, in every weekends, we always required my dad to drive us to the house for seeing how it was going firmly. It grew up and looks very different in every weeks. Seeing how it grew up is such an touching thing when all imagines about it are always in my heart so far. I still clearly remember when my family was choosing the color for this house. After we have pondered long enough, finally we decided for its main color is cream besides some highlight colors like black, red wine, brown,.. By hoping it’s going to be extremely graceful with a little naughty. When the building is done, each furnitures were bought by each family members arranged perfectly. Cult, the final thing finished. My dad walked around and looked at the house, and said “Finally i’ve done my big dream in my life, you took a lot of my money, do you know that? But it’s okay, I’m very thankful for being with my family during this time”. At that moment, i realized, this is not the end, this is a new starting of a new journey. Years i lived in that house, they are such a peace and comfortable with me.

The last day of my first year study in America finally end. The bell rings, i walk very fast up into the daily bust i catch almost everyday. I start packing stuff into valis immediately when i just came home so as to take a flight back to Vietnam. I would sit on the plane with a lot of emotion, nonstop imagining how change my country had before i was in. Finally i can breath in the same environment with my dear city. I come forward to my house when the plane just landed. A black big door of my house gradually appear in front of my eyes. I push it slowly and pass the garden are full of bonsai around that my dad feeds and takes care of them everyday. I was choking by that familiar warmth when i stepped into the house. Everything doesn’t change so much like before i left. From furnitures to some small stuff and things are still on the same arrangements mom’s favorite. Even their colors have a little older and not brighter but its qualities are still good. Living room is my favorite place in this house. And actually, most of good memories of my family also attach with this special room. Where all family members gather together, laughing, and confabulating in every important occasions. Where me and my brother always contest a slot for watching television. And we cry, comments in whatever shows, movies when we watch together. Sometimes, me and my mom watch korean movies and scream whenever we see some guys are handsome or beautiful. So many levels of emotions happened on this room. I walked around this room, and touch everything, those make me feel a little stranger but also a little closer, may be because i haven’t seen it for quite long time. I stop in front of my favorite sofa accidentally. I used to lay on it a lot of whenever i feel tired or stressed out. I start touching it slowly, the velveteen is very soft and comfortable when i sit on. I can smell lavender fragrantly. Its perfume is very gentle and pleasant. Lavender indeed is perfume favorite of my mom. The wind chime above living room’s window rings whenever wind blows. That sounds are still on one of my favorite things, so peaceful. I see a hot tea tray on the table, it has a smelt which is quite bitter and strong. I don’t like this smelt even a little bit. But i can’t understand why my grandma was very this when she was still alive. Because of curiousness, includes i haven’t been drunk this traditional drink of my home country for 1 year, i pick up the teapot and slowly pour the tea into a cup. The teas sound flow very natural. I put a spoon of sugar into and then stir it. After that, i blow it near my mouth for warming a little bit. I drank a sip. Its hotty still has so much and makes my tongue is burned a few but that’s okay, follow this immediately is tasties of bitterness and sweet. It makes me miss my grandma, her face, her voice,.. warmed my cold heart so much in every times i felt lonely.

Now if i have a wish, i wish i could have a ticket back to my childhood time when i was still lived in this house. The times i don’t have any afflictions or anything i need to worry about. The times just had laughing and smiles. When my family was still together, nothing could divide us. This place is one of things that i want to protect and maintain it forever… I can’t imagine what is going to happen if i lost it. That’s such a terrible thing i never want to hear. May be in the future, i will live in another house which more expensive and beautiful than it but the only thing i’m very sure about is its place in my heart won’t never change. It’s like my family, my best friend and always be my best “heaven on earth”.

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A black big door of my house gradually appear in front of my eyes
A black big door of my house gradually appears in front of my eyes

it has a smelt which is quite bitter
it has a smell which is quite bitter

Sentence: Its hotty still has so much and makes my tongue is burned a few but that's okay, follow this immediately is tasties of bitterness and sweet.
Error: tasties Suggestion: tastes
Error: hotty Suggestion: No alternate word

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
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No. of Different Words: 550 200
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Sentence Length SD: 8.377 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.372 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.241 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.306 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
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