The writer of memorandum concludes that total demand for electricity in their area will not only increase, but also it is going to experience a decline in the future. To support this conclusion the writer claims that all home owners are eager to conserve energy; furthermore, the new home appliances being used nowadays are more energy efficient than they were a decade ago. This argument rests on series of unsubstantiated assumption, and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.
The first problem with the assumption is that the writer investigation does not show a meaningful differential between the people really eager for conserving energy and the people who consume energy wastefully. It is not mentioned how many people have been considered for reaching to that conclusion. As you know, in research studies the greater the number of people in the sample, the more reliable and valid the findings are. Maybe, the writer just got the idea by considering the people around himself so it was not comprehensively investigated, and there is not a firm conclusion based upon this eagerness to use energy more thoughtfully among wide spectrum of people under examined.
Secondly, the writer is not certain about energy consumption rate of the people living near their area as it may be possible that those three electric generating plants were sufficient till now but it cannot be enough for the following years’ demand. With taking this fact into consideration, we all know that with such an increase in population nowadays, we can hardly expect scheme of conserving more energy. In fact, demands will increase with augmentation in population. Although making people aware of conserving energy will have an enormous effect in long term, we cannot guarantee all the people are consuming energy more efficiently, as well.
The third point is that even if all those assumptions made by the writer were plausible, there is still a fact questioning the validity of assumptions as the more a society is getting developed and technologized, the more increase in demands for doing works with electric appliances instead of physical working will be. For instance, in past, the housekeepers used to do much of their duties with hands which now they substitute the application with much easier and labor-free appliances than before and it again will loosen the assumption conclusiveness.
To abridge my words, in order to accept the assumption, the writer should provide the reader with much more clear evidences in how he reached to that conclusion. eagerness to conserving energy and how did he estimated the available plants are really sufficient for all the people living and those who are going to live there in the near future, without implementing the validity of all the evidences he would provide, we cannot count on these assumptions validity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 335, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...physical working will be. For instance, in past, the housekeepers used to do much of th...
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Line 4, column 397, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ers used to do much of their duties with hands which now they substitute the appl...
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Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Eagerness
...s in how he reached to that conclusion. eagerness to conserving energy and how did he est...
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Line 5, column 443, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'assumptions'' or 'assumption's'?
Suggestion: assumptions'; assumption's
...would provide, we cannot count on these assumptions validity.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'third', 'well', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'you know']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.223320158103 0.25644967241 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.162055335968 0.15541462614 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0750988142292 0.0836205057962 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0770750988142 0.0520304965353 148% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0434782608696 0.0272364105082 160% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.134387351779 0.125424944231 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0553359683794 0.0416121511921 133% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91095515324 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0217391304348 0.026700313972 81% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.114624505929 0.113004496875 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0237154150198 0.0255425247493 93% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0118577075099 0.0127820249294 93% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2853.0 2731.13054187 104% => OK
No of words: 463.0 446.07635468 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16198704104 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377969762419 0.378187486979 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.254859611231 0.287650121315 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.198704103672 0.208842608468 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.155507559395 0.135150697306 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91095515324 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 207.018472906 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509719222462 0.469332199767 109% => OK
Word variations: 58.9169977788 52.1807786196 113% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 30.8666666667 23.2022227129 133% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.9661784572 57.7814097925 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.2 141.986410481 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8666666667 23.2022227129 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.13333333333 0.724660767414 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 56.3526277898 51.9672348444 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.46153846154 1.8405768891 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369094619247 0.441005458295 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.137230667817 0.135418324435 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0890427987688 0.0829849096947 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.613662365726 0.58762219726 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.165209990594 0.147661913831 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168650463815 0.193483328276 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868731495537 0.0970749176394 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.39581612704 0.42659136922 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0326243433986 0.0774707102158 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264124417098 0.312017818177 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329008105203 0.0698173142475 47% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 6.46551724138 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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