The writer of memorandum concludes that total demand for electricity in their area not only will not increase, but also is going to experience a decline in future. To support this conclusion the writer claims that all home owners are eager to conserve energy; furthermore, the new home appliances being used nowadays are more energy efficient than they were a decade ago. This argument rests on series of unsubstantiated assumption, and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.
The first problem with the assumption is that the writer investigation about the people really eager for conserving energy does not show a meaningful distinction between them and the people who were consuming energy more wastefully. It is not mentioned how many people have been considered for reaching to that conclusion. As you know, in research studies the greater the number of people in the sample, the more reliable and valid the findings are. Maybe, the writer just got the idea by examining the people around himself so it was not comprehensively investigated, and there is not a firm conclusion based upon this eagerness to use energy more thoughtfully among wide spectrum of under examined people.
The second, the writer is not certain about energy consumption rate of the people living near their area as it may be possible that those three electric generating plants were sufficient till now but in cannot be the same for years ahead. With taking this fact in mind, we all know that by increasing population more and more nowadays, we should not think so optimistic and
The third point is that even all those assumption made by the writer are plausible, there is still a fact questioning the validity of assumption as the more a society is developed, the more increase in demands for doing works with electric appliances instead of physical working will be. For example, in past, the housekeepers used to do much of their duties with their hands which now they substitute the application with more easy and labor-free appliances and it again will loosen the assumption conclusiveness.
To abridge my words, in order to accept the assumption, the writer should provide the reader with much more clear evidences in how he reached to that conclusion. eagerness to conserving energy and how did he estimated the available plants are really sufficient for all the people living and those who are going to live there in the near future, without implementing the validity of all the evidences he would provide, we cannot count on these assumptions validity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...t also is going to experience a decline in future. To support this conclusion the writer ...
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Line 4, column 34, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'those assumptions'?
Suggestion: this assumption; those assumptions
...c and The third point is that even all those assumption made by the writer are plausible, there...
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Line 4, column 302, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
... physical working will be. For example, in past, the housekeepers used to do much of th...
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Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Eagerness
...s in how he reached to that conclusion. eagerness to conserving energy and how did he est...
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Line 5, column 443, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'assumptions'' or 'assumption's'?
Suggestion: assumptions'; assumption's
...would provide, we cannot count on these assumptions validity.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'third', 'for example', 'you know']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213186813187 0.25644967241 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.16043956044 0.15541462614 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0879120879121 0.0836205057962 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0791208791209 0.0520304965353 152% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0461538461538 0.0272364105082 169% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.12967032967 0.125424944231 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0505494505495 0.0416121511921 121% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81620391126 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0241758241758 0.026700313972 91% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.120879120879 0.113004496875 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0197802197802 0.0255425247493 77% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0131868131868 0.0127820249294 103% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2545.0 2731.13054187 93% => OK
No of words: 422.0 446.07635468 95% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0308056872 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.348341232227 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.241706161137 0.287650121315 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.187203791469 0.208842608468 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144549763033 0.135150697306 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81620391126 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 207.018472906 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507109004739 0.469332199767 108% => OK
Word variations: 56.7840733242 52.1807786196 109% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.039408867 60% => OK
Sentence length: 35.1666666667 23.2022227129 152% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.2883515484 57.7814097925 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 212.083333333 141.986410481 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.1666666667 23.2022227129 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.08333333333 0.724660767414 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 59.3372827804 51.9672348444 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.37692307692 1.8405768891 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355619990321 0.441005458295 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.144691000105 0.135418324435 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0878411747043 0.0829849096947 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.645419512479 0.58762219726 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166103319951 0.147661913831 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185143476808 0.193483328276 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858446230818 0.0970749176394 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.424512400945 0.42659136922 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0271683922723 0.0774707102158 35% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257286069139 0.312017818177 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339649896614 0.0698173142475 49% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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