In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
The speaker claimed that Prunty County’s lowering speed limit is not an effective move to curb highway accidents, while Butler County’s various attempts at transforming the highway works well, thus Prunty County should follow its guidance. However, the speaker’s deduction lacks several crucial evidence in order to convince.
First of all, the speaker deems the new speed limit a bootless law, since the number of accidents has not decreased and drivers constantly exceed the limit. It seems to me that the situation was exactly the same as before the new limit was imposed. Thus, I doubt if it is the implementation of the new law that has gone wrong, instead of the law itself. For instance, the speaker should provide evidence on how hard the law makers worked to inform citizens about the new law and how familiar drivers are with the change of speed limit. If only a few drivers have ever heard of this lowered speed limit, the speaker’s following deduction will be groundless.
Even if the drivers are well-informed of the new regulation, which means the lowering speed limit has little effect, the speaker’s comparison between Prunty County and Butler County is hardly a solid one. On one hand, Butler County’s decreased number of accidents cannot be solely attributed to the road improvement project. It could be that highway patrol has been working extra hard, or safety education in Butler County has been extraordinarily successful. Information about other efforts made in order to make highway safer in Butler County should be included.
Say that the road improvement project almost solely contributed to the achievements Bulter County has made, it is still important that the speaker provides evidence such as the number of accidents and the road condition in both counties five years ago. Factors such as narrow highway, rough highways and dangerous intersection could always have contributed little in Prunty County, while serves as the notorious road killers in Butler County. If this is case, then emulating Butler County’s policy would have no use at all.
Essentially, throughout the argument, the speaker fails to point out what is main source of highway accidents in Prunty County, whether it is exceeding speed limit as implied in the argument, or poor road condition as supposedly in Butler County, or other factors that have not been brought up in the speaker’s deduction, such as drunk driving, ineffective highway patrol or frequently terrible weather. Without fully understanding the nature of accidents, it is futile to come up with a solution, let alone one that blindly follows another county where things could be completely different.
To sum up, the speaker’s proposal of adopting Butler County’s road improvement project in Prunty County and abandon the lowered speed limit is not convincing enough. To make a more solid claim, the speaker need to provide numerous evidence such as 1) how where the new speed limit is known to the public; 2) other efforts Butler County made to improve highway safety; 3) distinction between the highway situation of both counties five years ago and 4) the core reason of Prunty County’s road accidents. Before these evidence are provided, it would be too hasty to reach any conclusion.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2791.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 532.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2462406015 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86693205768 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475563909774 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 844.2 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.3370641304 57.8364921388 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.894736842 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293481478316 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102741876973 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788055232133 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181354194951 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604244623095 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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