On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.
The argument about the number of accidents could not support its result effectively and is as timely as ever. Ambiguities about the statistics, numbers decrease the reliance on evidence while author could render strong evidence with better statistics. The evidences and numbers which the author has provided are alone neither constitutes a logical argument in favor of the conclusion not provides compelling support making the argument sound. A careful scrutinization of the problem would reveal the Achilles’ heel of the article, which can be listed a follows.
First and for most, if there is reduction in rentals of number of mopeds than it would result either in the increase of the persons on each moped or either it would result in increase in the rentals of cars. Both the situation will not help in reducing the number of accidents on Balmer Island. As the number of persons will increase on moped it is very likely to lose the balance which will result in an accident. Also reducing the number of moped rental will increase the number of pedestrians which will also result into increase in number of accidents.
What's more, the author have compared the situation of the neighboring island of Torseau but have not mentioned any statistics or evidences to prove the scenario. Like we do not know anything about the geographical loaction of that island whether it is suitable or same as that of the Balmer Island. Also there is no information about the number of tourists visited the island of Torseau last year. What if the number of tourists visited the island last year was half the visitors which visit every year.
Last but not the least, author have mentioned a statistics of reducing the number of rental mopeds from fifty to thirty per day. What if most rental companies on Balmer Island rent only twenty five mopeds each day then this statistics will not help at all in deduction of the number of accidents.
To summarize, though the conclusion seems to be plausible, in fact, it lacks credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. Author could strengthen his position by providing evidences like number of mopeds rented and other measures to tackle the reduction in number of rented moped or the one discussed above. So, to make it logically acceptable, the author would have to provide more evidence concerning the interior and exterior factors as well as overall survey result about attitudes towards the problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...lance which will result in an accident. Also reducing the number of moped rental wil...
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...e or same as that of the Balmer Island. Also there is no information about the numbe...
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...t only twenty five mopeds each day then this statistics will not help at all in dedu...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'in fact', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259911894273 0.25644967241 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.138766519824 0.15541462614 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0616740088106 0.0836205057962 74% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0594713656388 0.0520304965353 114% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0198237885463 0.0272364105082 73% => OK
Prepositions: 0.154185022026 0.125424944231 123% => OK
Participles: 0.0286343612335 0.0416121511921 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61069121437 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0198237885463 0.026700313972 74% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.125550660793 0.113004496875 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0308370044053 0.0255425247493 121% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0198237885463 0.0127820249294 155% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2519.0 2731.13054187 92% => OK
No of words: 420.0 446.07635468 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.99761904762 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.4 0.378187486979 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.252380952381 0.287650121315 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190476190476 0.208842608468 91% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109523809524 0.135150697306 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61069121437 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 207.018472906 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459523809524 0.469332199767 98% => OK
Word variations: 49.8809249522 52.1807786196 96% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 24.7058823529 23.2022227129 106% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0867308553 57.7814097925 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.176470588 141.986410481 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7058823529 23.2022227129 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.724660767414 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 49.943977591 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.0303030303 1.8405768891 110% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.568961256119 0.441005458295 129% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.177908157438 0.135418324435 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.108947363055 0.0829849096947 131% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.693288239774 0.58762219726 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0736750678466 0.147661913831 50% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.294406200421 0.193483328276 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051515141228 0.0970749176394 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.400215883009 0.42659136922 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0580618173546 0.0774707102158 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.413992983191 0.312017818177 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353093405022 0.0698173142475 51% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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