The author claims that teachers in Sanlee should assign less homework than now because frequency of homework is contributing factor to improve students’ academic performance. This conclusion is based on comparison Marlee’s district with Sanlee’s, however, it seems that the author relies on numerous assumptions which not fully justified thus it is necessary to provide more information to evaluate the recommendation.
Firstly, the author assumes that primary cause of students’ performance is frequency of homework, however, it may not be the case. The frequency might not directly correlate to volume of assignment and the volume is not directly parallel to the time and effort required to complete them. Further evidence pertaining to difficulty of two districts’s homework is necessary to evaluate the author’s conclusion.
Next, the author presumes that method of science and math is applicable to every subjects, however, it may not adapt to overall subjects. Even if homework of two or three days per week produce better performance for math and science, there may be other subjects which need more effort for everyday, for example, musical or language courses may require more steady effort to yield better performance. Thus, the author have to suggest if there is no harmful effect of less frequency of homework for other subjects except for math and science.
Lastly, the author conjectures that district of Sanlee and Marlee is comparable, nevertheless, they may have different characteristics to compare with. There are several contributing factors to determine students’ academic performance besides frequency of homework. For example, two districts have difference in teaching effectiveness, previous education background of students’, socio-economic background of students’ or atmosphere of studying. Those factors may influence an ability of students, thus, evidence relating to characteristics of two district is essential to evaluate the author’s claim.
In sum, the author tried to make a plausible recommendation, but evidence for justifying the conclusion is limited and author depends on unjustifiable assumptions. To be more valid claim, the author need to provide evidence pertaining to difficulty of two districts’s homework, side-effect of less homework for other subjects, and similarity of two districts is necessary.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1948 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.55 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.051 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.304 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.411 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.637 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 289, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...e and effort required to complete them. Further evidence pertaining to difficulty of tw...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...her subjects which need more effort for everyday, for example, musical or language cours...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 279, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[14]
Message: Did you mean 'side effect' (=adverse effect, unintended consequence)? Open compounds are not hyphenated.
Suggestion: side effect
...difficulty of two districts’s homework, side-effect of less homework for other subjects, an...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, nevertheless, so, thus, except for, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 351.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.76068376068 5.12650576532 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2466884465 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492877492877 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5918575144 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.428571429 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0714285714 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18046461569 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696669604656 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465822721335 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109254895137 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361261443046 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 48.3550499002 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 12.5979740519 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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